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Fade Away
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Saturday, 20th January 2007 @ 11:34:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I feel you fade away,
Like the wind whips away the mist,
Like a bird flies south from the nest,
And leaves but feathers in the air.
I feel you slip away,
Like the zephyr takes the salty spray,
And flies it out onto the bay,
And whoever dares to feel it there.
And I wish that I could feel it now,
{Every drop to match each tear,
Born from under heavy brow.}
...And that winds shall call you here.
I feel you fade away,
Like an echo lost upon a storm,
A shadow lost in seas of light,
Born from broken morn.
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by faith_my_eyes on
Saturday, 20th January 2007 @ 11:37:52 PM AEST (User
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I really like this edit, this piece is very wistful and full of regret |
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Saturday, 20th January 2007 @ 11:43:48 PM AEST (User
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Hun such a taste of sadness but so beautifully written. I felt the fading.
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 12:58:16 AM AEST (User
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aww such a sad and beautiful soulful write.
you did great philly girl.
hugs
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by silver_crested_shadow on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 02:13:54 AM AEST (User
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awsome, awsome awsome, i love this poem written wonderfuly, sad and yet still moving |
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 03:41:29 AM AEST (User
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Wow, these are truly impressive lines. You've really managed to capture a lot of emotion in each and every word here, my friend. Well done.
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 03:50:26 PM AEST (User
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Sweet PhillyGirl your writes can always touch the readers heart and you make them feel your pain and sadness through your very well ascribed words.
An impressive and outstanding piece of poetry. All the credit goes to the gifted poetess behind these sad but excellent penned verses. Well done my dear friend.
with love n hugs,
sue m |
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by Bbear61 on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 05:27:33 PM AEST (User
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Very touching, certainly one of my favorites.
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 06:51:01 PM AEST (User
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Iagree, very touching, moving, sad but beautifull masterpeice.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by yangdantien on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 09:09:20 PM AEST (User
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The depth of loss you compose here is summed up with excellence:
"...A shadow lost in seas of light,
Born from broken morn."
Bravo
Peace
Yang |
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 22nd January 2007 @ 04:51:56 PM AEST (User
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oh hun .. holy CRAP !! This is heart-shredding!!
I'm so sorry that you (or ANYone) must endure this
sort of pain and anguish. It tears at the soul, but that you
have the courage, strength, and magnificent talent to
put these emotions to page in such a perfect and moving way
is outstanding, hun.
I am more akin to these emotions than I'd like, sometimes ..
but hope, for me, is a much better road than that of regret.
such is my lot, I guess.
*hugs you so tight*
beautiful pain, sweets. I am moved to tears ..
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by stillstitch on
Monday, 29th January 2007 @ 08:55:14 AM AEST (User
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Goodness! Everything I have read this morning has to do with saying goodbye somehow...or not saying goodbye...not sure. I think I really like this though because it truly feels the break. I really like the last line...it conveys such truth.
Love you,
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 31st January 2007 @ 06:34:51 PM AEST (User
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breath taking write philly!! beautifully done.. this is a masterpiece.. great job
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by zenith66 on
Thursday, 17th May 2007 @ 09:45:43 AM AEST (User
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once again i love this. you are sooo good and you captivate me with yor words. seriously inspiring and wonderfully simple in its structure.. damn good
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 12th August 2007 @ 05:51:32 PM AEST (User
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Just roaming the site this morning and what a find this was.I think this is tremendous,caught my mood perfectly.
It is beautiful poetry that simply slipped into me.
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Re: Fade Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by JamesStockdale on
Wednesday, 27th February 2019 @ 10:54:03 PM AEST (User
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This was special to me.
I loved it.... Beautifully written and executed....I
loved the flow too!
Jim |
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