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The Call of the Self
Contributed by
spike
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Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 11:36:17 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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In the hills in the distance,
lies a path few dare breach
that brooks no resistance
and tolerates no speech
I ventured there in Autumn
as last leaves fell to frost
and returned some part broken
lamenting what I’d lost.
In the caves, in the darkness,
is a silence none can hold
that hungers for a soul mate
but embraces only cold
I rappelled there on heartstrings
and hung in deaf abyss
and felt such dreadful yearnings
that I wondered what I’ve missed
Sometimes in the morning,
when I am veiled in sleep
I sense a gentle stirring
from somewhere low and deep
it draws me to the surface
to where I am alone
but somewhere on the journey,
I know I will atone.
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spike
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2007-01-19 23:36:17]
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Re: The Call of the Self
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 11:54:06 PM AEST
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My first thought was the author's note pretty much says it all ... but that would have left no room to comment on the fabulous words that followed .....
I feel a bit of me in here Spike, and God knows I'll need to make more than a few amends before my journeys are complete, but if you're doing the best you can ... isn't that all that can be expected ?
Quite well written my friend,
Nazzy ~
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Re: The Call of the Self
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by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 20th January 2007 @ 02:18:40 AM AEST
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Ahhhh the Tarot cards. Had a reading did ya? This was really an interesting write and I found myself really melding into some of your lines. The second stanza being a real eye opener. The very last lines sort of iced the cake for me...
"but somewhere on the journey,
I know I will atone."
good stuff.
Peace and hugs,
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Re: The Call of the Self
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by MisfitMe on
Saturday, 20th January 2007 @ 03:35:13 AM AEST
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Of course, I much enjoyed the depths held herein...but, it was the flow which took not my effort to find...that I enjoyed most!
BigLoveMuchPeace,
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Re: The Call of the Self
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 20th January 2007 @ 12:49:42 PM AEST
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Insight and wisdom.....nice qualities to have on the journey. You have both my friend, along with an abundance of poetic talent.
Excellent
Very well done
Barkeep!! |
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Re: The Call of the Self
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 10:08:31 AM AEST
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Like Laura, I found myself wallowing in your lines... there are so many here that are appealing to the point as to make it impossible to resist a temptation to do so (not that I know why one would wish to resist to begin with!).
Your expression delights me. Its appeal, I've resolved, has to do with more than word choice and flow (though both are terrific). I'd be remiss really if I failed to comment on the tone of this piece, its cadence and the something-more that makes it most poetic. The reader (least, this reader) feels the tone of this, is carried by the cadence and is left feeling as though they've been dancing in the rain.
Nice work, Spikito. Seriously nice.
~Snem
(who wishes, actually, that she could manage something like this 'round about now)
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Re: The Call of the Self
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 04:55:01 PM AEST
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Spike~ you are truly an amazing poet you know that. When have I ever visisted your pages and been disappointed? Never!
but somewhere on the journey,
I know I will atone.
These lines are definately the icing on the cake for me. All the credit goes to the extraordinary poet behind these incredibly penned verses.
Well done my dear friend and keep up the brilliant work~
love n hugs from ur aussie fan/friend,
sue m |
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Re: The Call of the Self
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 22nd January 2007 @ 06:48:27 PM AEST
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oh wow .. spike. I found this .. well .. (sorry), but sad somehow ..
the tarot cards at the beginning set a mood for me, I guess ..
to think that we do not choose our path is somehow, (to me)
dreadfully sad.
You know .. it seems that my life is like a tarot reading itself.
full of little bits of this and that and always, ALWAYS filled with
emotion, undaunted. I feel .. so much so, that I sometimes think
my heart might just explode. But, do I have the choice? hmmmmm
I think fate whispers .. she caresses .. sometimes she
may even kiss us , leading us in a certain direction,
but ultimately we make the choice, methinks. We control whether
to accept or not accept the "guide", making your last line that
much more meaningful to me. Yes .. the inner demons are
challenging to say the least. The path toward a peaceful soul is
overflowing in a tangled mass of thorn-laden brush.
This was so bloody well written. I loved it altogether ~
well done S. One for the books . .
~Breezy
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Re: The Call of the Self
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by trulovaAKAthetruth on
Tuesday, 6th February 2007 @ 03:57:23 AM AEST
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THIS POEM IS REALLY TIGHT
AS I SEE THAT I COULD HAVE
WROTE THIS MY SELF
AWSOME JOB
THE TRUTH
TOMMY HART JR |
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