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Lover's Last Thoughts
Contributed by
Bishop_008
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Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 01:25:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Here, I lay silent. Your hands clenching mine
You tell me to hold on, and that I'll be fine
We both know ourselves that those words just aren't true
I can tell by your crying, and your sweaty palms too.
I start to cough blood and you flinch at the sight
The pain in my chest, I can no longer fight
Oh darling, I'm so glad I jumped in just before
The bullet threw you down, to die on this floor
I wish I could tell you how much I respect you
But the blood in my throat just will not let the words through
I feel myself slipping in a dizzying haze
Of rapid-speed visions of happier days
I see us in Paris, our 1-year last November
I don't need to remind you, I know you remember
Now I feel nothing but the warmth of your touch
Goodbye and so long, I love you so much...
Copyright ©
Bishop_008
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2007-01-19 13:25:40]
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Re: Lover's Last Thoughts
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by Nothingness on
Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 01:40:54 PM AEST
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| *wipes a tears from eye* oh wow... how sad... very nicely wrote but such a sad story... well dont very nice job in expressing. |
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Re: Lover's Last Thoughts
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by shelby on
Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 01:58:52 PM AEST
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The scene unfolded right before my eyes.
I about had a tear or two welling up in my eyes as well. You wrote this with greatness.
Michelle |
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Re: Lover's Last Thoughts
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by lost_in_the_darkness09 on
Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 03:51:11 PM AEST
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this is like.....awesome!!!! i love it....its sad....but beautiful...and its just..wonderful!!!
{rA!n} |
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Re: Lover's Last Thoughts
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 04:56:13 PM AEST
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Oh my, how sad, you had tears in my eyes.
A heart breaking write expressed so well.
You did an excellent job with this. Well done.
warm hugs,
sue m |
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