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~*With Love From Afar*~
Contributed by
eternal_dreamer
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Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 04:26:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The dark stormy clouds
Shadow the horizon tonight
The whispers of the breeze
Sway softly through the trees
Your voice caresses my mind
Arousing deep emotions
Sweet eternal bliss is felt
As rain drops kiss my lips
I have craved this moment
For a while now
Alas it's savoured taste
Will not last forever
You are so far
Yet so near
Thunder addresses the sky
He will not be visible tonight
Yet he still laces my heart
With love from amidst heavy skies...
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by jerseysue on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 05:12:50 PM AEST (User
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Beautiful one Sue, I loved it, but could not resist an answer. Sue x
Love can cross the globe it seems,
To share its loving kiss,
Distance is no object,
As it sends its loving bliss,
No barrier can hold it back,
No mountain or ocean deep,
For love remains within our hearts,
For us to share and keep.
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 05:18:14 PM AEST (User
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Sue,
your words whispers softly from afar this is delicate and beautiful. Tenderness woven with the grace of the poetic pen.
Michelle |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 05:52:58 PM AEST (User
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Sometimes, the things - the people that are dearest to us, that are most treasured to us are miles away, but in the end the love we have for them is not different then if they were standing beside us. You show that here. Very beautifully and delicately written sue.
Always a pleasure to read.
-Cassy |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by PhantomVampyress on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 06:25:47 PM AEST (User
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wow a beautiful hopeful write.. such elegance in wording.. very enchanting write
vampyress jenni |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by moses on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 06:44:34 PM AEST (User
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I love it!!!! Amazing. I love the change in style, I always change it up, it makes it more interesting and helps you expand as a writer. Very well done and glad to see you posting. Please Please check out my new poem, These Unfinished Lines.
Keep writing/from your friend,
-moses |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by yangdantien on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 09:00:33 PM AEST (User
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This reads like a love song from Mother Nature to Zeus...
How earthy and alive:
"...Sweet eternal bliss is felt
As rain drops kiss my lips..."
Beautiful
Peace
AJ |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by MisfitMe on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 09:31:34 PM AEST (User
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Zeus...Thor...it doesn't matter...
THE GODS OF THUNDER HAVE DECREED THIS A LOVE SONG WORTHY OF THEIR WONDEROUS SELVES!!!
& I agree, teehee...
But, seriously, in this as in everything you write, be they your comments to others or your own poetry, TENDERNESS, is what I read & appreciate most about your poetic soul!!!
BigLove,
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 09:34:27 PM AEST (User
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Sue your writes are truely beautiful.
I am so impress
hugs |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by myheartsvoice on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 10:10:48 PM AEST (User
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a truly magnificent peice. Airy and imaginitive. absolutely lovely.
myheartsvoice |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by deadheadpoet on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 10:52:33 PM AEST (User
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Wow Sue, that was so totally beautiful..I loved the ending...
"Thunder addresses the sky
He will not be visible tonight
Yet he still laces my heart
With love from amidst heavy skies"
Thanks for sharing.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Saloni on
Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 03:31:24 AM AEST (User
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beautiful! just beautiful the way u wrote this poem! very emotional powerful poet! my dearest friend i hope you recover soon may god give you all the hapiness in life!
i know how it feels he is so far apart yet so near deep lines you have wrote.. u'l find your love sooner or later just keep strong..
this is the best way to express your feelings write them down... but please don't ever cry coz u and ur tears are precious!
don't let love ruin you.. try to move on.. there are plenty fishes in the sea however you love the one who you love can't help it
i hope you do find ur true love.. i want you writting happy poems! all lovey dovey 1s then i'l know u've moved on..
im very heart touched by this poem its beautiful!
may god bless you
lots of prayers for you sue..
love you my sweet friend X |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 09:15:13 AM AEST (User
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Wow! Beautiful!
I love the way you blended the rain and storm with love.
What do you think about changing "laces" to "lances"? Just a thought.
Beautiful, beautiful piece. |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by brew on
Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 09:49:27 AM AEST (User
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Of course this brings the reader in pondering over how far, and whats next?!lol......I do truly love the entire, write, such flow..such feel.....Always a pleasure to read what sue has penned. We get something incrediable , each time we read.
Hugs
Brew~ |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Clarity_Rising on
Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 10:51:01 AM AEST (User
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Another superb write by a very
talented poet. I really like the
turbulent emotions coinciding
with the stormy weather. Great
work and beautiful write!
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Rakerman1999 on
Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 04:45:36 PM AEST (User
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Over the last couple of days I have read some of the best poetry I have ever found on this site...this is among the finest. Your heart flowed though your pen in ever line.
Very well done my friend
Roses by the score
Larry
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by faith_my_eyes on
Saturday, 20th January 2007 @ 01:25:10 PM AEST (User
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I definately can feel this one--it seems we are in similar predicaments, away from who we love, longing to be near them, still feeling them...
anyway beautifuly expressed. I love the last few lines the best, they define the longing and love-- "He will not be visible tonight/Yet he still laces my heart/With love from admist heavy skies..."
Poignant and emotional. This stray from your normal style is a classic. |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Bishop_008 on
Saturday, 20th January 2007 @ 02:53:39 PM AEST (User
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Wow. This is amazing. Good job. :)
-Ryan |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 22nd January 2007 @ 04:12:04 PM AEST (User
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Gosh, sue this was a wonderful "unique" piece from you.
I love that you tried something different It worked
out well.
"Your voice caresses my mind"
I cannot begin to tell you how that line affected me .. it
is so sweetly soft and gentle and insanely romantic.
( you know me .. lol)
I think of all your writes, I love this one the most ..
I can't decide why .. perhaps it's the bravery you faced in
penning it. And accomlishing the perfection found right
here on this page. It's beautiful hun. Truly ~
*hugs*
~Breezy
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Crow on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 09:55:51 PM AEST (User
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my god almighty, what a beautiful, and lonely piece of art. I so like this..Crow |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by wizard on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 09:59:38 PM AEST (User
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such a great write sue, it embraces what i've longed or for so long, and it always seems to be 'so far' ... great post!!
wiz |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 28th January 2007 @ 12:47:32 AM AEST (User
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Sue~
..this is magnificent luv..a true testament
to your unlimited diversity and unique style and talent.. and it read so personally..like a page from a diary~
..so much vulnerability and longing for that single love - so very touching my friend..
a wonderful write Sue~
I've missed your work very much..
As always,
B |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Crow on
Sunday, 11th February 2007 @ 09:06:16 AM AEST (User
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this will be one of my favs.
When I was in your country I went out at night alone, along the ocean shore, sometimes to a near mountain. I`d stop for a cuppa" no one knew my thoughts, they were mine...
I promised myself I would return, and I will.
this write brings it all rushing back. Crow |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Sunday, 18th February 2007 @ 11:39:37 PM AEST (User
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Wo friend, I'm way far behind here.
This is a very good write, Halmark quality.
Very good work even if I'm so late.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Spike on
Monday, 26th February 2007 @ 05:10:34 AM AEST (User
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Sue, a mixed bag, this one. Sweet expression and transient peace amidst volatility and tempestuous metaphors.
dark and thought-provoking.
S |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 16th March 2007 @ 03:18:31 AM AEST (User
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Clearly trying something different works just as well for you as the 'usual' fare! ; ) Well Miss SueQ you sure did say a mouthful in so very few words, now didn't you? I think this is a great piece; the expression is clear and concise, it's loving with the slightest hint of a naughty edge! I have to admit though; right or wrong, I can't help but feel there's a double entendre here... like it makes me think of a lover you're waiting to be with who maybe lives in another city, country, *ahem* across the blue... ; ) but on the other hand, it also makes me think of a prayer-like promise to a cherished loved one who is deceased... and you are waiting to be reunited with them once more, but in the meanwhile the sweet rain pouring down on you is like a deep emotional connection to that person for the time being... Either scenario sounds just as pleasing to me, but either way this is thought-provoking and beautiful to read : )
~Scorp. |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by venkat on
Saturday, 24th March 2007 @ 12:43:30 AM AEST (User
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WoW..absolutely a stunning poem.
Love and anguish of separation..
both are painted in excellent tones.
amazingly beautiful piece..:-) venkat |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Crow on
Thursday, 12th April 2007 @ 12:24:47 PM AEST (User
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my`goodness Sue I don`t even know how to comment, you capture the reader with such a beautiful painting of words. Vincent |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Monday, 16th April 2007 @ 12:46:24 PM AEST (User
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exquisite...
love n' hugs nessa |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 19th April 2007 @ 06:59:44 PM AEST (User
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wonderful as always Sue. you are a special lady and I missed you so much , huggs and kisses sent to you, from an devoted admirer from a across the blue |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 26th April 2007 @ 12:28:03 AM AEST (User
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Completely Superb! A tremendous and wonderful proclamation! I love the flow, the wording is excellent and deeply, I mean deeply poetic!
WONDEFUL!
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Dom on
Sunday, 6th May 2007 @ 07:58:18 PM AEST (User
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I fell into this poem and swam within its words, it was gorgeous!
You write with such grace and tenderness it is a pleasure to read your poetry. Beautiful personification of the weather as emotions.
Dom |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by AnenaLynne on
Friday, 27th July 2007 @ 10:19:49 PM AEST (User
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o..m..g Your metaphors and personification were absoultly BEAUTIFUL! loved reading it!
~nena |
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Re: ~*With Love From Afar*~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
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Love is such a beautiful emotion. I just love "love poems" and yours are at the top of the list
MIKE |
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