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Electric Totem
Contributed by
yangdantien
on
Tuesday, 16th January 2007 @ 09:59:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Where crabgrass,
and stallions,
wheedle in wind song
fibers strengthen
to oddly hand build,
staple over labor,
the clans now gone
they are longer
than human,
the throat dynamic of
group gives direction.
Elbows in grime
mark the sides of the body
while running free
through fields of reason,
tilled seeds harvest
in nut brown height
to thigh,
the night then gives birth
to watchers perched
ancestors and spirits
stacked in years
taking hints
from clear intentions.
The body is industry:
family housed,
clothed,
schooled,
christened to set sail
amid the chop
and weather of sugared cities.
Sounds become verbs,
a science of the concrete sets,
entwined in presence.
Each wood from the land
is one instance:
Ash for strength,
Maples bittersweet,
Oak invokes,
Beech in prayer,
Pine to long,
Fir repairs and
chiseled the alchemical
idol breathes
the living sculpture.
Set upon hidden geodes,
frequency to pink,
the lift of tongue
charges to ignition
squares off with urge,
as 'love' is uttered
to feed the hungry,
efface poverty.
AJPIII
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yangdantien
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Re: Electric Totem
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 16th January 2007 @ 11:31:28 PM AEST
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Depth of mind and such beauty in this write. I loved this photo too . Where do you come up with all of this?
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Re: Electric Totem
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by MisfitMe on
Tuesday, 16th January 2007 @ 11:55:05 PM AEST
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I'd love to be a fly on the wall of your mind...just to witness your process. you have once again provoked me to thought, for which I thank you & your, " Electric Totem ".
"...as 'love' is uttered to feed the hungry"
this alone had nothing to do w/ my mind, but flew straight into my soul & introduced itself as beauty!
BigLove,
~KerryLynne
p.s. an utterance bein' close kin to a murmur...tighter still... |
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Re: Electric Totem
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th January 2007 @ 10:15:17 AM AEST
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enchanting.
breath- taking...
just stunning.
Whats new!
-Natalie |
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Re: Electric Totem
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 17th January 2007 @ 10:23:13 AM AEST
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Stunning piece of poetry, AJ. I really dug the ending, it just wrapped it all up nicely. The pic is very cool.
Peace and hugs,
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Re: Electric Totem
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by brew on
Wednesday, 17th January 2007 @ 02:54:47 PM AEST
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What a neat pic, and what an incrediable write, to boot......Loved it.....Will continue to read more, of yours.......Keep posting
Brew~ |
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Re: Electric Totem
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by CuriousitysCat on
Wednesday, 17th January 2007 @ 10:11:51 PM AEST
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Wow, this poem pulled at me from the very beginning. I do believe I failed to grasp all concepts but I tried :] And I really felt the way you sculpted the whole poem with your seemingly natural flow of words. I liked the feel of past and present that I got. These however are the lines that really TOOK me:
"Elbows in grime
mark the sides of the body
while running free
through fields of reason,"
The imagery and metaphor was so powerful here for me. Another radical poem by [in my mum's words] brother yang.
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~JaZz |
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Re: Electric Totem
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 09:07:36 PM AEST
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Hey AJ~ Another intriguing masterpiece by you my dear friend. The journey and heights you take your reader on are just "wow". Your work is unique and different.. You have really made a impact on YPDC. Thank you for sharing your remarkable work with us.
Blessings to you~
ur fan/friend,
sue m |
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Re: Electric Totem
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by needledancing on
Sunday, 4th March 2007 @ 12:36:49 AM AEST
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| this is one of my favourites so far...the essence of the totem, the wisdom of the wood as if you carved it from your heart yourself...how wonderful to have captured the artful beauty of the spirit that is within...well done dear friend. |
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