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A Measure of Solitude
Contributed by
fionndruinne
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Monday, 15th January 2007 @ 02:23:28 PM in AEST
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A measure of solitude -
Am I to stand, gazing up
At a marked container
Held against the sun?
Or am I to look past it
At the eye of the sky,
Putting a blind eye in the scales
Against blindness of perception?
Scientists, masters of minutiae,
Wear the white coats
Of dealers in grief and insanity.
I’ll not know their ways.
I, like a nomad new-come
To language, use the ancient terms:
A foot, a palm’s breadth,
And keep at heart every proper span.
© MMVI ADL
Copyright ©
fionndruinne
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by yangdantien on
Monday, 15th January 2007 @ 04:14:04 PM AEST
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There are some words that defy expectation of comprehension unless you let let them sink in...this piece bypasses that where my heart and mind now jutting out as a corbel of art & strength seeming support for the souls rooftop.
Brilliant
Peace
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by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 15th January 2007 @ 06:12:45 PM AEST
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Andrew, The simple mechanisms of this piece are superb. This so speaks of you, or my perception of you. *wink* I so loved the last stanza. Always a delight to see you've posted something new.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by ever1der on
Monday, 15th January 2007 @ 07:18:08 PM AEST
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simpleton that I am..I take this as I read it..putting nothing extra into it and just see someone looking through a container of something that the sun is shining through..
seeing the sky and all it's glories; not worrying about the scientific measurings and reasonings..just enjoying. Whatever it means, it's beautiful. |
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by Clarity_Rising on
Monday, 15th January 2007 @ 09:15:52 PM AEST
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This poem is excellent. I like
your use of symbolism. Great
write!
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 16th January 2007 @ 03:39:05 PM AEST
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Andrew,
this meant many things to me. Coming at a proper time. Universe has a way of planting seeds of comfort and greatness when needed most. I thankyou for that.
I find this write as all of your others pure, untouched and surpassed by none.
~Michelle~ |
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by Nazmythian on
Wednesday, 17th January 2007 @ 04:50:05 PM AEST
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Often times your writes challenge me to re-read them and attempt to grasp their full content. However I find that each time I return, something new rises up out of your words. A new image, thought, or idea appears from someplace I hadn't seen them before. I appreciate that you do that to me. Thank you Andrew. You never fail to impress.
Nazzy ~
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 11:46:32 AM AEST
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And this silence that you speak of? Can it truly measured but for each alone?
Well done sir! Very impressive!! |
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 20th January 2007 @ 12:20:22 AM AEST
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What delights me so about this piece is that it begs the reader to visit with it. ("Stay, please stay"). And I did... but as a visitor... staking no claim... assuming I knew nothing more than it allowed me to know. As best I can describe it... it felt like standing in a room within an art museum... feeling the presence of the paintings on the walls around me and wanting to close my eyes so that I might hear them better.
Yes... it felt a lot like that, and it was really rather wonderful.
~Snem
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 20th January 2007 @ 01:02:44 AM AEST
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..an exquisite and beautiful bombardment of imagery and metaphor Andrew.
It isn't all that often (infact, hardly ever) that I
would quote stanzas and such.. but here, the
finale should be celebrated to a PAIN my
friend~
..also, I would most assuredly fortify and duely
recommend your sentiments in the second stanza
to anyone who seeks to find some greater
perspective~
..all seemingly, without an ounce of effort by you.
I'm happy to have finally stuck around..lol
Wonderful work, as always Andrew~
As always, sincerely yours,
Billy |
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by faith_my_eyes on
Saturday, 20th January 2007 @ 09:32:18 AM AEST
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Thank you for the simplicity of this piece... it fits with what you wish to communicate... just see, sense, and enjoy. A beautiful reminder. Excellent write, as usual, my good friend.
Em |
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 02:10:08 AM AEST
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| Simple and beautiful..Venkat |
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by Whisper on
Friday, 26th January 2007 @ 10:10:50 AM AEST
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Nice write Thanks fer sharing
Whisper |
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by inlovewithaladd on
Sunday, 28th January 2007 @ 12:51:52 AM AEST
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| it's such a great thing to find a writer one enjoys... this is a beautiful piece, thank you. |
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by stillstitch on
Monday, 29th January 2007 @ 06:23:53 PM AEST
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OK...I could be wrong here, but I see you standing at the edge of something. Decisions must be made, and they will not be rushed. Taking time...waiting on God's answers is the proper path, and you are right to take it. Waiting will reveal the truth and the will you seek. Maybe I'm all wet here, but that's what I read. It's not a bad place to be you know.
Blessings on you, Andrew.
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by Spike on
Monday, 5th February 2007 @ 03:21:33 AM AEST
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Andrew, most enjoyable and inducive of reflection. I wish I had thought of this title - but I would have written a vastly different poem, and this one is a real treat.
I thought you measured solitude by how much you could stand ie when you've had enough, it becomes loneliness, when you go beyond that, its insanity.
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 07:31:48 PM AEST
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Max weber would have appreciated this poem.
Essentially it is a comment on the sterility of popular modern social/ interpersonal relationships,which tend to be very secular, clinical, and rational to the point of absolute emptyness.
And worst of all, very unromantic.
Max weber disagreed with Marx, who said that the most dangerous consequence of capitalist societies was essentially social inequality. Max weber said this was not so.
Weber said the most tragic consequence was the stifling regulation, rationalisation, and dehumanisation that accompanies expanding bureacracies. He said this would lead to an "ever increasing disenchantment with the world". He also predicted that eventually science would completely overtake religeon, and envisaged modern society as a vast and growing system of rules seeking to regulate everything and crush the "human spirit".
"The modern individual is only a small cog in an a ceaselessly moving mechanism that prescribes to him an endlessly fixed routine of march".
Well, here we are.
I liked this poem completely, apart from the third strophe which contains the abstractions of " grief" and "insanity". It also has a slightly dogmatic, or "severe" edge, which clashes too harshly with the melancholic tone throughout.
But quality, very high quality. Well written,
excellent.
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by emystar on
Saturday, 24th February 2007 @ 02:44:48 AM AEST
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A great write from a great poet.
big huggs,
emy |
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 18th March 2007 @ 02:47:36 AM AEST
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your mastery and wisdom of the english language
are unsurpassed andrew.. truly-
a beautiful metamorphosis of thought to verse.. this work is.
B
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 17th April 2007 @ 01:55:40 AM AEST
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beautiful perfection!
love n' hugs nessa |
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by inlovewithaladd on
Thursday, 21st June 2007 @ 09:41:59 AM AEST
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| i am awed. thank you. |
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Re: A Measure of Solitude
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by PlainFreshRain on
Monday, 17th November 2008 @ 02:10:39 AM AEST
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First of all, its been too long since I read you Fionndruinne
Second, I had to look up minutiae:) It means precise details; small or trifling matters
Is it not a trifle to look at the stars and stifle,
that a man does not know every staple
let it alone and gaze
hold it against your stomach and..
keep at heart every proper span
you are a man of the earth and I applaud your intelligence to remain so
Conal |
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