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Echoes Of Me
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Sunday, 14th January 2007 @ 09:05:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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These empty seconds echo through me,
grown from pain like poisonous seedlings,
there to choke the life inside,
(There is no longing to survive)
So leave me dead inside my chest,
and let the thorns kill off the rest.
Twisting vines beneath my skin,
eradicate the joy within,
and suffocate the gift of feeling,
leaving death inside me, beating,
where my heart once used to be
...now just live echoes of me.
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by ever1der on
Sunday, 14th January 2007 @ 09:14:33 PM AEST
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| Oh this is so sad, yet wonderful. I just wish it was mine..how do you do this? Everything is great from the title to the very last word. (clapping..) |
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by deathdrop on
Sunday, 14th January 2007 @ 09:16:05 PM AEST
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this is absoloutly brillaint!
i feel just the same hun... you're not at all alone!
... i don't know what else to say...
x x x x
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by HoneyCat on
Sunday, 14th January 2007 @ 09:33:21 PM AEST
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i can feel your pain just by reading this
your wording helps me to relate |
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by amateurwriter on
Sunday, 14th January 2007 @ 09:39:13 PM AEST
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| Wow!! that is an awesome poem!! (in my humble opinion, obviously)... I really liked it!! it's raw, not pretty, not obvious (all these are compliments!! believe me!!) ... I liked it a lot!! |
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 14th January 2007 @ 09:51:47 PM AEST
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Sweets .. as I've said already, this is incredibly painful
and pain-FILLED~
(sadly .. I relate, as I'm sure many do)
My heart breaks .. such a feeling of helplessness and
hopelessness within the words .. it's excruciating!!
Your talent is stellar hun .. I just wish it was being exercised
with a happier write. Hopefully soon, your heart will sing
a sweeter tune .. and the days of sorrow will be a memory ..
*hugs you tightly tons*
~Breezy |
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by yangdantien on
Sunday, 14th January 2007 @ 09:52:25 PM AEST
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Excellent composition had me spin in response:
The spatial abilities of the poet to undulate, map and feel their internal terrain radiates awe. Distance created from pain and constant reflection creates such canyons from which these echoes rally as death replaces all.
These words push the poets envelope. I sense and pray the development of wings sprouting to overcome any turmoils with wisdom and purpose as death is replaced with flight.
An honorary doctoral degree from the University of Hard Knocks is rippling upon these echoes.
Peace & Blessing
Yangdantien |
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by Shattered_soul on
Monday, 15th January 2007 @ 12:13:56 AM AEST
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being broken
it hurts deeply
but bandaids help
and keep bacteria out.
im sorry your feeling down
and I hope you get lifted up! |
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by tifrob on
Monday, 15th January 2007 @ 02:53:34 PM AEST
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Excellent Poem. But sad to read.
~Me~ |
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 15th January 2007 @ 06:54:24 PM AEST
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Wow Phyllis, This was intense to read. You wrote this so very well, I swear I can almost hear the echos. Beautiful but so sad.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 11:54:27 AM AEST
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Sis,
When you reach down and feel pain, you feel it with such depth and intenseness that it consumes all of you. I am happy to know that you can also rise above and feel great love and happiness in the same capacity.
I hope you get there soon.
Hugssssssss! |
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 09:06:49 AM AEST
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Sad and very beautiful.. It touches me.. I like this poem.. They way you captured you emotions and thoughts was amazing... Great poem...
Take care
Christina |
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 31st January 2007 @ 06:36:33 PM AEST
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this is very sad but very powerful and emotional write.. you can feel this piece immensly.. tragically beauitful write
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 18th April 2007 @ 03:05:21 PM AEST
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simply beautiful, pure of heart.
love n' hugs nessa
roses |
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by zenith66 on
Thursday, 17th May 2007 @ 09:49:49 AM AEST
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what can i say this is toching too me and such truth in your words and expression. keep it up im loving your writing..
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by kye on
Monday, 9th March 2009 @ 07:32:43 PM AEST
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When I read your poetry, I feel epic pauses - so dramatic that I contemplate my own ability to express emotion.
You have always had this way of balancing dark or sad or pain and making it speak to the reader-yet the reader sways back and forth allowing you to balance and conclude.
I could give you many compliments, but you receive so many, that it would seem superficial for me to tell you that your pen brings forth the strongest amount of emotion that a writer (of any sort) can have. It is true nonetheless. It is.
Raw emotion, perfectly blended, velvety with images - to make you cry or just feel... Is something very powerful. You have that.
Echoes Of Me, is still resonating all the way inside me.
-Kie |
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Re: Echoes Of Me
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by JamesStockdale on
Sunday, 3rd March 2019 @ 11:29:48 PM AEST
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An empty soul still echoes a heart beat....
Great expression here!!! |
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