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Blood on the Roses
Contributed by
NoSaint
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Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 07:28:42 AM in AEST
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A dozen white roses he had in his hand
Also an engagement ring and wedding band
To take to his love so sweet and true
Ready to ask her to say I do
Through the dark streets he did stride
Not soon enough to ask her to be his bride
An ominous silence was in the air
Scared but go on he must dare
Out of the shadows a figure in black
He was not ready for this kind of attack
A woman beautiful beyond compare
With lovely blue eyes and long blonde hair
Skin of the palest of hues
Almost translucent sort of blue
She smiled and his heart had a pang
For her teeth seemed to be fangs
Mesmerized by this unusual sight
Could not move he was frozen with fright
Then savagely at his throat she tore
Till she had her fill his life was no more
Off she went to her favorite haunt
Knowing she would not be caught
Now this sorrow on his love imposes
For all she has left is his blood on the roses
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NoSaint
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Re: Blood on the Roses
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by Nothingness on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 08:01:31 AM AEST
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| wow, amazing write. rather sad but still beautiful and excellent! |
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Re: Blood on the Roses
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by glassicallyunsuperficial on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 08:33:07 AM AEST
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i like the story and the rhythm of this poem!Its really good!
cheers,
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Re: Blood on the Roses
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by needledancing on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 08:40:39 AM AEST
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| Enjoyable. Good rhyme. I enjoy vampire movies. Mystical poems about vampires is a good twist.You could also relate lifes twist and turns that change our path as being a force that can bleed us dry.Like that beautiful vampire. |
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Re: Blood on the Roses
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 09:10:10 AM AEST
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Beautiful.. It is the only thing that came to my mind.. This was really amazing..
Take care
Christina |
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Re: Blood on the Roses
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by flamingblade on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 09:47:36 AM AEST
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nice. excellent dark write.
very... haunting.
good work.
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Re: Blood on the Roses
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by yangdantien on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 01:22:56 PM AEST
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All too often writers romanticize the demoness with fangs...Here clearly is the other side, an often neglected point of view, delivered in quatrains most effectively.
Bravo
Peace
Yang |
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Re: Blood on the Roses
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by Clarity_Rising on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 01:34:31 PM AEST
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| A very tragic poem, well posed. I can tell you choose your words very carefully. Excellent write! |
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Re: Blood on the Roses
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by Rakerman1999 on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 05:50:55 PM AEST
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Shari !! I LOVED this ! As usual one of us poor guys is ripped assunder by a beautiful woman. lol
Seriously , this was excellent writing
Very well done
Roses
Larry |
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Re: Blood on the Roses
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by xMyxBleedingxHeartx on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 09:34:25 PM AEST
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| Oh my, I loved it. :) |
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Re: Blood on the Roses
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by xMyxBleedingxHeartx on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 09:35:22 PM AEST
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| Oh my, I loved it. :) |
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Re: Blood on the Roses
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by V-I on
Saturday, 13th January 2007 @ 06:25:45 AM AEST
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| entrancingly appealing. |
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