|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Sugar
Contributed by
Zajabalaj
on
Thursday, 11th January 2007 @ 06:04:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
|
Sugar, why me?
Sugar, too sweet
I'm drownin' in your eyes
Those seemingly sweet, blue eyes
Sugar, you are beautiful
Sugar, cruel to me
A glorious rose in the dark
Stunning, yet dangerous
Sugar, it's done
Sugar, no more
I've turned sour without you
All things sweet have left me
Copyright ©
Zajabalaj
... [
2007-01-11 18:04:47]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Sugar
(User Rating: 1 )
by PhantomVampyress on
Thursday, 11th January 2007 @ 08:08:57 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
this is a really creative write.. i like this piece alot.. I especially love the last stanza awesome job
vampyress Jenni |
|
|
Re: Sugar
(User Rating: 1 )
by Alex23 on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 01:41:39 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Hey, very neat write. It's simple yet catchy, and I like the mood changes, which show progression. Awesome job! |
|
|
Re: Sugar
(User Rating: 1 )
by Muhammadshanazar on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 09:01:21 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
"All things sweet have left me" a very nice expression, reality is bitter and those who learn to embrace reality taste bitter but then nothing hurt them for they have learnt timly sweetness is nothing more than illusion. A nice piece, take care.
Muhammad Shanazar |
|
|
Re: Sugar
(User Rating: 1 )
by Clarity_Rising on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 01:41:35 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Very touching and creative. I like your connection between sugar and love. We seem to need both to live. Excellent write! |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
