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a least she didn't cry
Contributed by
burnhollywooddown
on
Thursday, 11th January 2007 @ 08:31:55 AM in AEST
Topic:
hbadday
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She didn't look back.
she didn't shed a tear
she let the pain pass her
she let it be aside
she let it go away
and closed her eyes hoping you to see u
one last time.
and when she opened her eyes and u didn't
appear it broke
her heart
but
a least she didn't cry
She laid her head every night
visions of you always in her mind
to her you were still perfect
even tho she remembered that "your not mine"
she could of almost
but
a least she didn't cry
she might have said some things
like i hate you and such
or she might have thrown away all your stuff
she might have broke down and nearly died
but
a least she didn't cry
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Re: a least she didn't cry
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by deadheadpoet on
Thursday, 11th January 2007 @ 10:32:51 AM AEST
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I sort of dug your write here, although I'd rather see "u" be the actual word "you". It seems more mature/professional looking. Blah Blah that said. What you wrote was a feeling I think many of us can share. One thing I kept thinking though, what is wrong with letting go with that good cry? I'm a bit emotional and friggen cry like a baby at times...it can be cleansing as hell. I'm talking the deeply sobbing and snotting kind of cries.
You strength here is noble...but again don't be afraid to let the tears flow.
Peace, Laura |
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Re: a least she didn't cry
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by PhantomVampyress on
Thursday, 11th January 2007 @ 12:13:03 PM AEST
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this is a very creative write.. I liked the flow.. I agree with laurabean about the word "u" though.. very good write though..
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: a least she didn't cry
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by burnhollywooddown on
Thursday, 11th January 2007 @ 10:14:53 PM AEST
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| Well the meaning of this poem was pretty much that this girl was strong and she felt like she was strong enough not to cry and in her mind crying would be the default of her. So even tho she did all this stuff and was going through so much she felt strong because she didn't cry. |
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