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Intellect Revisited
Contributed by
CuriousitysCat
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Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 10:02:46 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Questions fill my rusted mind
As the wheels begin the tedious turn
My fingers ache for this release
And within shifted states of mind
Time stretches past me as I completely unwind
And the silence fills these spaces inside
Where once emptiness chose to reside
Things constrict and pull
Working like they use to
Tearing it all up
I'm streched too
Far
And it feels good
No need to make a future scar
I wonder without end
I run through the possibilities lack of existene
For once my mind isn't obsessed with wanting
To mend
And through everything as it's all come
To seem
I've risen to a new height
Feelings running their course
Some settled...Stopped in for the night
Visiting with old feelings and some memories
I've smoothed into a realm
Where chaos meets peace
As the wheels begin the tedious turn
My fingers ache for this release
And I look to find
Waiting while
Questions fill my rusted mind...
~jlC
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Re: Intellect Revisited
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 10:17:42 AM AEST
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*clapping* What a superb write my, young sister. You share the wonderful talent of writing with your mom. The beginning of the write exuded so much wisdom. You already are a remarkable young woman. *hugs you tight* I could not help but be reminded of "The Wheel" by the Grateful Dead when you mention..."as the wheels begin the tedious turn"
I shall copy that piece of the song that speaks to me so many times..and again your poem was a cause to remember.
Small wheel turn by the fire and rod,
Big wheel turn by the grace of God,
Every time that wheel turn 'round,
Bound to cover just a little more ground.
Peace and hugs,
Laura
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Re: Intellect Revisited
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by LockedIllusions on
Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 10:56:45 AM AEST
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| such beautiful words!! Please do keep up the good work!!! |
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Re: Intellect Revisited
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 11:02:48 AM AEST
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| oh man, yet another person here who puts my work to shame! |
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Re: Intellect Revisited
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by yangdantien on
Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 12:34:46 PM AEST
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I know exactly that feeling of just giving birth to a piece that rings all the bells that make me thrive...
I can see this piece doing this for you. I especially liked:
"I'm stretched too
Far
And it feels good
No need to make a future scar
I wonder without end
I run through the possibilities lack of existence..."
A chord struck that chimes with all of us...
Keep the Pen Flowing
Peace
Yangdantien
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Re: Intellect Revisited
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by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 12:55:43 PM AEST
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another beautiful write.. you have talent and such emotion in your writing.. i like your style of writing
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: Intellect Revisited
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by MisfitMe on
Thursday, 11th January 2007 @ 01:41:12 AM AEST
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" For once my mind isn't obsessed with wanting to mend..." For you to know what this is about, whether in concept or reality...wow, you're so ahead of the game! Yea, team Jaz!
Excellent write, babez!
Peace~MumMe ;} |
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