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The Journey of the Ash
Contributed by
Trauma
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Sunday, 7th January 2007 @ 01:16:20 PM in AEST
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The Journey of the Ash
My fine filtered friend
My only solace in the aftermath of unrequited love
I’ve found someone to love; that I always find all too easily
Finding someone to love me is much harder
Maybe too hard for a **** up like me
I take a deep drag and try to burn it away
I tap my friend nervously
An ash escapes and begins to float around
The journey of the ash begins to fascinate me
It refuses to land
It finds itself continually caught in the wind
Every time I think its journey is over it finds some invisible upwind and continues
It moves behind me and I turn eagerly to see where it plans to fly next
There is something beautiful in it that I don’t understand
I can’t understand what it’s so powerful to me as a tear escapes my eye
It refuses to die
Its journey continues for a few minutes more, never without my eye on it
As the ash finally relents and falls to the floor I turn away
I’d rather not see its end
I take another drag and watch a new ash begin its journey
My cigarette soon dies and I am left
The journey of the ash brought me brief solace, but reality does not hide for long
My thoughts go back, as they always to do to her
I remember how much I love you and how you will never love me
I remember all the foolish, lovesick things I’ve said and how they don’t matter to you
I remember that I’ve been here before
I remember this feeling
My heart sinks and I close my eyes
I light up another cigarette
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Trauma
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2007-01-07 13:16:20]
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Re: The Journey of the Ash
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by Clarity_Rising on
Sunday, 7th January 2007 @ 01:58:25 PM AEST
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| I find this poem very interesting, making a cigarette appear as a friend, as often smokers do. I liked how you described how it numbs your emotional pain, with out completely blocking it. But it appears to me that like the ash, your journey of “unrequited love” could too come to an abrupt end. This is merely an interpretation, but it seems as though through painful recollections, you have come to this very conclusion. Perhaps there will be a sequel of a new and prospering love? Best of wishes! |
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Re: The Journey of the Ash
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by Trauma on
Sunday, 7th January 2007 @ 02:00:39 PM AEST
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| Hey you got my symbolism:) No I'm not even anywhere near over this one to think about anyone else yet:) |
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Re: The Journey of the Ash
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 7th January 2007 @ 10:30:26 PM AEST
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Hmmm not weird at all...quite good in fact. I use to be a cigarette smoker so I do understand the smoke as a friend. I loved how you took the time with this....I too was watching the ash. Thanks for sharing.
Peace, Laura |
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