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Whispers in the night
Contributed by
Gravehorn
on
Wednesday, 3rd January 2007 @ 04:57:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
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On the hardened leather lining rests my body, cold and whining
For a flame to burn forever in this soulless shell of mine.
For I nodded, dearly dreaming, gilded dreams with all the seeming
Of a moonlight that is streaming, midst the silken curtain line.
Casting such a stately banner, in a calm and gentle manner
Like a star that burns forever in the barren, darkened sky.
Suddenly I sat awaken, ‘though my sleep-ness had been taken.
Up I sat with all the weakness of mine heart and soul and mind
Frightfully I sought the morrow, for behind my saddened sorrow
Hides a demon sent to borrow from the burdened, deaf and blind.
Like the frosty chilling feeling, that one feels when he is stealing
Glances at a darkened mistress far beneath the stormy sky.
Startled still I heard a mutter from atop the window shutter
Whispers of the lost beguiling candid fallen days of yore.
Like an anxious, deepened yearning, for escape from ever turning
Darkened eyes with all the burning for the flesh they so adore.
All the strength I had had left me, as I gazed upon unseemly
At the darkness that forever seemed to fill the barren sky.
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Gravehorn
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Re: Whispers in the night
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by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 3rd January 2007 @ 05:01:16 PM AEST
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awesome write.. I enjoyed this piece.. I can tell you were inspired by poe.. good flow to this piece and good wording thanks for sharing
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Re: Whispers in the night
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by ShadowsOfTheMoon on
Wednesday, 3rd January 2007 @ 06:36:34 PM AEST
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This is really well written. The poem flows and rhymes and is still able to maintain powerful images and meaning. Really great write!
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Re: Whispers in the night
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 3rd January 2007 @ 07:09:27 PM AEST
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It reminds me of robertEdgerBurns @
A member on this site!
He's a verry prolific, great writer.
Good work.
huggs,
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Re: Whispers in the night
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by yangdantien on
Wednesday, 3rd January 2007 @ 10:11:47 PM AEST
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Very well done. The piece has the familiar metric and delivers most effectively.
Excellent
Peace
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Re: Whispers in the night
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by tissueshaveissues on
Thursday, 4th January 2007 @ 11:17:44 AM AEST
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| You were quite effective in using Poe's style. It definately reminds me of The Raven. The second to last line seems to kind of break the flow, but other than that, this is very well written. |
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