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Love
Contributed by
errious
on
Tuesday, 2nd January 2007 @ 01:15:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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With the feeling of happiness
That courses through you body
Like Adrenaline
As you set your eyes firmly and calmly
Upon hers
With one goal swimming
In front of your eyes and consciousness
You know what to do
You know how to act
As she turns and walks
You follow
And as she breathes
You breathe for her
With every breath passing
Smoothly and calmly
Through your lungs with ease
Like laying on a beach
With the warm water
Heated pleasantly by the sun
Flowing
Around you and
Trying to ease you slowly...
Slowly
Into its beautiful depths
And as the light reflects
Beautifully from her hair
That swims around her head
Beckoning you towards her
Love or lust
You can’t tell
You don’t care
But the hairs on the back of your neck
Stand on end
When you gaze dreamily
Into the eyes of heaven
And you see a future
Something to look forward to
And with a wish to follow
As she has to leave you
But you know
You can see her tomorrow
And being aware of this thought
Suddenly every need in your life
Has been accounted for
As you watch the remaining hours
Slowly ticking away
Until you enter heaven again
Copyright ©
errious
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2007-01-02 13:15:07]
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Re: Love
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 2nd January 2007 @ 02:40:42 PM AEST
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wow this is a very powerful write actually.. its like you really have felt for this person or at least the poem makes it seem like that.. its conveys a very powerful feeling of love and well put into words I enjoyed this piece thanks for sharing
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Re: Love
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 15th May 2007 @ 10:11:51 PM AEST
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A smooth flowing and very compelling stream-of-consciousness write. I know a piece like this can be interpreted in a number of ways - dreamy infatuation and straight up stalking among them, but I prefer the pure of heart idealism that is grounded in possibility.
well done,
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