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Hides Perfectly
Contributed by
Jen_unknown_to_myself
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Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 01:32:24 AM in AEST
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“Hides Perfectly”
By: Jen
Drip, drip, drip
Another scar
is added to her arm
As the rain slashed
Against her window
Another crimson tear
Fell to the ground
She never dared let
Anyone see that scar
Or the other ones
So she hid the perfectly
Not a soul realized
She was hurting inside
So yet another crimson tear
Hit the floor
As the rain slashed at her door
She’ll never let those
Crimson tears be seen
So she cleans them up
Perfectly
When she stands in the rain
She is able to cry out her pain
Her tears spill from her eyes
She loves the rain
Because she is able to hide
The pain inside perfectly
Scars, crimson puddles, and tears
Are easy for her to hide
But also easy for someone else
To notice if they care enough
No matter how
Perfectly she hides
So far no one has noticed her
Scars, crimson puddles, or tears
She’s guessing no one cares
Hopefully someone will notice
How perfectly she hides
Before she closes her eyes for good this time
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Re: Hides Perfectly
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by blindchoice on
Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 01:47:12 AM AEST
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| Wow. I loved it. expecially that fact that you used crimson instred of red....great write. |
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Re: Hides Perfectly
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by SilverDagger on
Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 06:15:14 AM AEST
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That was one deep poem. I loved it.
Drip, drip, drip
Another scar
is added to her arm
She never dared let
Anyone see that scar
Or the other ones
So she hid the perfectly
Not a soul realized
She was hurting inside
So yet another crimson tear
Hit the floor
As the rain slashed at her door
I can perfectly identify with those lines. Your development of the theme is particularly impressive. Keep it up (the writing, not the cutting)! |
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Re: Hides Perfectly
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by falcon on
Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 11:18:04 AM AEST
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| Wow, Jen, I think it's very powerful. And I hope it's not how you are feeling, but if it is, know that there are people who do care.... |
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Re: Hides Perfectly
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by shelby on
Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 03:49:35 PM AEST
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Tears cleanse the soul as rain cleanses the earth. Writing such powerful words mends the heart, so days or easier to withstand.
Put down the knife, pick up that pen and let it sing as it has done here. Mend the wounded soul hun mend the wounded soul.
Blessing, love and peace be yours
~Michelle~ |
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Re: Hides Perfectly
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by EddieDean on
Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 04:39:58 PM AEST
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Jen~
A good write here sweetheart, its oh so sad, but very well written. Cutting yourself may help you deal with pain, but writing and expressing your heartache in other ways are much more healthy.
Hopefully someone will notice
How perfectly she hides
Before she closes her eyes for good this time
We do care, I do care. You are a dear friend of everyone on this site and we notice your pain. There is no need to hide it anymore, let out and let it go.
Mike |
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Re: Hides Perfectly
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by unknown_utopia on
Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 07:40:54 PM AEST
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wow is right,
so powerful is this flow
excellent excellent write. |
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Re: Hides Perfectly
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 2nd January 2007 @ 02:57:32 PM AEST
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wow this is a very creative write on people who cut themselves.. this by far is probably the most creative original write on this i've read.. great job!!
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: Hides Perfectly
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by broken_blade on
Friday, 14th December 2007 @ 05:16:15 PM AEST
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| Great Poem!!!!! I love the style and the descriptive wording you added to the poem! Great job! and ya it definately can relate to the broken blade poem as well! thanks again and keep up the good stuff! |
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