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Paradise
Contributed by
DrowningHeart
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Sunday, 31st December 2006 @ 11:52:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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There is a place that lovers seek
a so called paradise
With coconut filled palm trees,
white sands and a deep blue sea.
Would we lay on the sand,
with a cocktail on hand?
Would you look in my eyes
and believe in this paradise?
The island birds will sing a song of love
and will stand face to face
on that so called paradise
An island, our secret place.
Copyright ©
DrowningHeart
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2006-12-31 11:52:45]
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Re: Paradise
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by yangdantien on
Sunday, 31st December 2006 @ 12:07:21 PM AEST
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I like this and imagine it was first written in steam on a shared mirror between moments...
Good Job
Peace
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Re: Paradise
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by unknown_utopia on
Sunday, 31st December 2006 @ 02:44:53 PM AEST
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An Island paradise
sweet
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Re: Paradise
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by CuriousitysCat on
Tuesday, 9th January 2007 @ 06:29:39 PM AEST
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I dig it. It kinda felt like a feeling i get sometimes where I am completely over stimulated in all the right ways and life just couldn't get better. A good thought to have in the back of one's mind every now and then.
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Re: Paradise
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by Wachumiri on
Saturday, 24th March 2007 @ 12:28:28 PM AEST
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I like it, but I think it may have been a bit overdone, worked over. But that's just me, you know your ben better than anyone else. I like the last stanza best, a good ending.
Take care,
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