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Girl on a Hill
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Wednesday, 27th December 2006 @ 11:33:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Girl on a hill in a peasant dress
Shading her eyes from the sun's caress
Wind runs his fingers through raven hair
Leaves swirl to earth in the Autumn air
Falling in torrents of gold's and reds
Leaving a carpet on which she treads
Down to the valley where I will be
Breathless until she is there with me
'Neath the old Oak at the river's bend
All of my waiting will come to end
Yonder she runs and her laughter rings
Into my arms and my spirit sings
Intimate dances to Nature's tune
Day will succumb to the stars and moon
And we'll lie together 'neath darkened skies
Content with the light from each others eyes...
Long, long ago yet I see them still
The Oak in the valley, the girl on a hill
Clearly remembered though time has passed
Blurring the reasons they couldn't last
Chances, like Autumn, can slip away
Sometimes forever is but one day
And always a moment just passing through
By a tree at the river , in love with you
L. Carling c2006
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Re: Girl on a Hill
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by FRANCO on
Wednesday, 27th December 2006 @ 11:46:13 PM AEST
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A wonderful presentation of love blended with nature. Good write friend.
FRANCO
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Re: Girl on a Hill
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 28th December 2006 @ 12:12:34 AM AEST
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i don't know that this will make any sort of sense... but...
It is always the 'underneath' of your work that tugs most at me. I do adore the words that you set so wonderfully on the page - but it is the something-else that lays there with them that really moves me. That something-else... well... it sometimes screams at me through those blank spaces, refusing to be overlooked. It is, I believe, what makes reading you such a moving experience.
Oh, and - Larry?... I respectfully refuse to accept "Sometimes forever is but one day" as truth. I appreciate, entirely, its inclusion here... but cannot bear to embrace the thought. I truly don't mean to be argumentative or disruptive... I simply mean to say that I cannot, will not, let go my forever, you know?
Sometimes stubborn (*wink*),
~Snem |
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Re: Girl on a Hill
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by NoSaint on
Thursday, 28th December 2006 @ 10:14:19 AM AEST
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As always your writes touch the heart
Shari |
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Re: Girl on a Hill
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 28th December 2006 @ 11:37:26 AM AEST
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You have, without any reasonalble argument, created a forever in one's mind with these magnificent words of love 'n' nature so brilliantly blended. Just me, but I say it's a MASTERPIECE~
wabl
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Re: Girl on a Hill
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by shelby on
Thursday, 28th December 2006 @ 01:37:55 PM AEST
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Beauty comes in the eyes of the beholder and my friend this is past beautiful.
Magical is one word I may use but of course never does justice to the feeling deep in my heart.
~Michelle~
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Re: Girl on a Hill
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by ever1der on
Thursday, 28th December 2006 @ 02:09:43 PM AEST
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"And always a moment just passing through
By a tree at the river , in love with you"
A moment just passing through..I can almost see it; a flash of memory..a smile passing over lips; a heart remembering love.. another gem..diamond-like..you never disappoint.
Forever can be but a day..or a day can be so wonderful it is like forever; or one would like it to be..yep.
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Re: Girl on a Hill
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by Clarity_Rising on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 05:47:04 PM AEST
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| You have beautifully crafted a romantic scene in this poem. You also behold a wonderful talent. Excellent write, I look forward to reading the rest of your poems. |
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Re: Girl on a Hill
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by Nazmythian on
Saturday, 20th January 2007 @ 12:34:40 AM AEST
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For as long as we have memory
That moment in time ... will always be
And that seems like forever.
Never do you disappoint Mr. Larry. A truly wonderful read. And a breathtaking moment.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Girl on a Hill
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 09:53:37 PM AEST
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Larry~ I humbly bow before you my dear fellow poet. What a remarkable and breath taking masterpiece you have wonderfully penned here for us to read & enjoy. A true poetic master who can conjure a memory to last in our minds forever~ Simply beautiful.
huge hugs from ur fan/friend,
sue m |
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Re: Girl on a Hill
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 01:57:39 PM AEST
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so true.....beautifully written larry:)
love n' hugs nessa
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Re: Girl on a Hill
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by ChenoaShiningwater on
Friday, 28th August 2009 @ 04:51:36 AM AEST
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Brought a tear (((hugs)))
Its been such a long journey from the "widow" write you sucked me in with lol up to now....when I can see how very much you have grown as a writer.You never cease to amaze me with your heart and the way in which it dances across a page.
Love you my ol friend and thank you for writing! |
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