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Eternally Tainted
Contributed by
trackiller2006
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Wednesday, 20th December 2006 @ 05:47:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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The crimson-stained sun has illuminated everything
Present and past is what i have imagined within this twilight
More than my own hands can accomplish
Please teach me how to live
A little more vulnerably than i do now
Won't you help me just a little?
That way, even if i get hurt
And lose everything around me
Your strength will flow through my heart
This dispute will probably go on
About what is most precious
I've become a rebel, I've overlooked things
Even the gentle smiles of strangers
If eternity knows what manner of darkness
And when pain will vanish,
Then that way, you shall taint me
I looked always to yesterday, to the castles in the sky
When will I be able to follow them?
My strength shall be my guide
Now, please, help me just a little
Please, just corrupt me, only a little
Death shall be my guide.
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Re: Eternally Tainted
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by RLSS on
Wednesday, 20th December 2006 @ 06:25:51 PM AEST
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"Please, just corrupt me, only a little"
Really great line, so conflicted, with that mix of a bit of everything that describes the line between transitions.
And...er...you didn't capitalize two of the "I"s in your poem... sorry. I can't help it! |
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Re: Eternally Tainted
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by purplestary on
Tuesday, 26th December 2006 @ 10:14:35 AM AEST
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| amazing write..so relatable too. i loved it as i do all of your work.;) |
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