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Lost Love
Contributed by
Nirvana12
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Wednesday, 20th December 2006 @ 05:24:49 PM in AEST
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LostLove
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I try to forget all of these thoughts that wont vacate my mind, I can not forget about her no matter how hard that I try. I want so badly to be with her but this wont ever come true, because she put everyone else above me. My love, my life it is blue. In my dreams I am with her but my dreams are wearing so thin, and they're fading away. My heart still screams out anytime that I will listen, but she has already found her love and me I'm left alone. Tears flow off of my face and form a puddle under my feet.It feels I could cry forever, it feels like my heart is dead. In my dreams I am with her but my dreams are wearing so thin and they're fading away. In life I am alone sitting by myself, sometimes with a friend, but never do I expect to find love if this girl I can't have. All the memories that I have of her are filled with laughter and joy but when I sway away from her lonliness comes running my way. In my dreams I am with her but my dreams are wearing so thin and they're fading away.
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Re: Lost Love
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by RLSS on
Wednesday, 20th December 2006 @ 05:56:39 PM AEST
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| It's pretty good... I like the dreams line. Personally, the paragraph fomrat just doesn't work with me. IThe poem is raw in thisquiet, hurt way- not perfect, maybe, but with a lot of potential. (Sorry if that seemed harsh... I don't think Im used to non-editing comments. x_x) |
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Re: Lost Love
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 20th December 2006 @ 08:47:01 PM AEST
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I feel so sorry for you~ you write with a pained heart. I hope things work out for you.
May time heal your wounds. Wishing you the very best~
take care
warm hugs,
dreamer |
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