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The Weather Outside is Frightful
Contributed by
yangdantien
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Tuesday, 19th December 2006 @ 08:56:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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Where eyes freeze
in seconds
and ice shards cut
through every cell
its cold
much less than zero
as heart heat is lost
in an instant decompressed,
one must always be protected
when walking in space.
Heavens medium
a hard vacuum
where fires are slowly dying
terrain to old radiation
fabric in which the hottest
furnaces burn,
boiling wind currents
through cosmic ocean.
See spots run in 11 year cycles
And since we've no place to go
blasts of such force
slam in to earths shields,
core magnetics re-routing,
into colorful sheets
often seen as wavering lights...
The forecast:
continued showers,
But as long as you love me so
just let it be known
your umbrella
is simply the ability
to ignore accordingly.
Spacesounds
and Seti @ Home. An ambitious project for every computer user.
AJPIII
Copyright ©
yangdantien
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2006-12-19 20:56:28]
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Re: The Weather Outside is Frightful
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by The_View on
Tuesday, 19th December 2006 @ 09:47:04 PM AEST
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| Didn't expect the ending, well done. |
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Re: The Weather Outside is Frightful
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by Ratwick on
Tuesday, 19th December 2006 @ 11:33:56 PM AEST
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Yang, once again you take me on a journey through some distant fantastical imaginary place, that stemmed from what really exists, when I read your work. Brilliant write! Thanks for posting and cheers to new years, new smiles and new tears!
Write On!
Peace! |
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Re: The Weather Outside is Frightful
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 21st December 2006 @ 12:28:30 AM AEST
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Once again you take my mind on an amazing journey into your poetic world. Excellently written, I am always left in awe after gracing your pages my dear friend. So sorry I don't have the right words to give you the credit this outstanding piece of poetry deserves.
You are truly a fine poetic artist dearest AJ~
Blessings to you my dear friend~
sue m
(who's just gotta get her head outta the clouds, lol)
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Re: The Weather Outside is Frightful
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 27th December 2006 @ 12:32:53 AM AEST
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Made me smile with this one again.
I guess I missed the link you will have to tell me about it.* rolls eyes*
Hugs
Michelle |
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Re: The Weather Outside is Frightful
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by CuriousitysCat on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 10:05:59 PM AEST
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Ah, something about this just made me laugh, in a very good way. I really enjoyed the little laugh I received from reading this it was really cool. I think between seeing the spots run the 11 year cycles, blasts of force with colorful sheets, seeing wavering lights, and umbrellas being equal in size to the ability to ignore I am just thrilled with this write.
;]
KeEp WrItInG!
~ThEnD |
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Re: The Weather Outside is Frightful
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 15th March 2007 @ 03:28:13 PM AEST
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There seems to be an awful lot of metaphoric value in this piece, (and in what work of yours I've read to date), and I find I like that abstract quality quite a bit... I may not know exactly what you're trying to convey in each piece, but I do see a common thread (perhaps 'cause I often do the same...?), you may start off a poem thinking of a particular subject to get off your chest, so to speak, but then tie it in with something else, something closer to home, if you will... Which is like a gift inside a gift; wrapped up in mystery! I love it.
~Scorp.
(Who read somewhere that your b-day is the day after mine) :) |
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