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Perfect Dreamer
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Monday, 18th December 2006 @ 09:52:54 PM in AEST
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Perfect dreamer
close your eyes
fool yourself with lullabies
Choose your visions
self deceive
in your world of make believe
Perfect dreamer
close your ears
only she who worries, hears
Safe and peaceful
go to sleep
deaf to hearts you've caused to weep
Perfect dreamer
close your mind
those who think will surely find
Life is tougher
than it seems
Just keep hiding in your dreams...
Foolish woman
heart of stone
doomed to live your life alone
How much longer
can you fake
happiness when you're awake?
L. Carling c2006
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Rakerman1999
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by shelby on
Monday, 18th December 2006 @ 10:03:33 PM AEST
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You put the hammer down on this one my friend.
As always nice to see you posting.
~Michelle~ |
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 19th December 2006 @ 04:04:58 AM AEST
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wow i agree michelle
Foolish woman
heart of stone
doomed to live your life alone
How much longer
can you fake
happiness when you're awake?
amazing |
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by NoSaint on
Tuesday, 19th December 2006 @ 06:06:43 AM AEST
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strong potent write
Shari |
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 19th December 2006 @ 07:20:53 AM AEST
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Hmm, Larry, some people do seem to be able to live lives of self deceit and conceit, oblivious or indifferent to the consequences. Well captured observations, within a smooth but insistent metre and excellent word choice.
S |
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 20th December 2006 @ 08:23:36 PM AEST
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You Sir Carling are one hell of a poet~
your poetry is amazing and you pen down the most outstanding masterpieces any given time.
Foolish woman
heart of stone
doomed to live your life alone
How much longer
can you fake
happiness when you're awake?
Very well written my dear friend~
Keep up the great work.
love, hugs n prayers ur fan/friend,
dreamer
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by RLSS on
Wednesday, 20th December 2006 @ 08:40:59 PM AEST
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"Perfect Dreamer" is absolutely brilliant.
I can relate so much to this.
It's easy, in some ways, as long as you know, that at the end of the day, you'll get to go back, to your dreams and your sleep. Lose yourself in your fantasies. Weep not, your heart is happy in your mind. |
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 23rd December 2006 @ 02:06:34 PM AEST
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You had this reader with the first stanza, Larry. I've been trying to comment on this for a while now... and finding it near impossible to do so. It's a powerful piece. An incredibly powerful, well executed (as always) and all-too-real piece. And it's sad. For everyone... it is.
Always moved,
~Snemmy |
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 25th December 2006 @ 06:14:52 PM AEST
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Larry ... this is so exceedingly sad. My heart breaks
just reading this ..
Those last three lines ... God, they are just so painful -
for more reasons than I care to think about or
mention. I feel the suffering within the words ..
and it is difficult to process, without literally falling apart.
I love this Larry. It is amazing. Truly amazing~
let me send daisies to the rose bearer .. for I feel daisies
are such happy flowers .. you can't help but smile when
you see a field full of them. :)
Merry Christmas to you and all the best for 2007
~Breezy |
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by ever1der on
Tuesday, 26th December 2006 @ 12:59:24 PM AEST
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for some of us..dreams are a shelter and we need to duck into our dreams when reality is throwing rocks at us. Who wants to be bruised with life when they can duck into a dream? This write was powerful and brought tears to my eyes.
mary |
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by Clarity_Rising on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 05:51:24 PM AEST
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| I really liked how you made the first half of your poem very soft and delicate and the last few lines cold and brutal. The sharp contrast makes me feel as if I’d been suddenly woken from a slumber. Very creative and effective. Once again, another excellent write. |
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 15th January 2007 @ 02:10:51 PM AEST
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Wow. Impeccably written, Larry! Such a lot of feeling found its way into these carefully crafted words. I'm impressed indeed.
Andrew |
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th January 2007 @ 11:08:15 PM AEST
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| this is excellent...as always...is very deep, but not to long...very well written...Shari :) |
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by zenith66 on
Monday, 22nd January 2007 @ 06:33:29 PM AEST
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An amazing write. A flawless passionate victory which rolls off the tounge..
top drawer stuff..
What a mindset! |
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by Wachumiri on
Monday, 19th March 2007 @ 10:50:59 PM AEST
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A very, very well written piece. Perfectly kept rhythm and rhyme. Always great to read your work.
Take care,
David |
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by needledancing on
Sunday, 1st April 2007 @ 08:32:48 AM AEST
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A powerful write. I could use this piece to send in a card to some very self absorbed people I've stumbled across through life.
The line-deaf to hearts you've caused to weep-being my favourite. |
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Re: Perfect Dreamer
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 20th April 2007 @ 10:25:16 AM AEST
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beautifully written larry, deeply amazing:)
love n' hugs nessa
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