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Save them leave me
Contributed by
lipsofanangel
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Wednesday, 13th December 2006 @ 01:53:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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With a frantic step
and a tear in my eye
I grab my sisters
To go run and hide
I land really hard
As a leg trips mine
I dont care about me
I have to save their lives
Run Girls Run!
Dont forget what I said
I start to cry
As thoughts blur in my head
Dear Lord Please
Dont let me die
Those 2 little girls
hiding in my room need my help
They cant do this by themselves
As my mother comes closer
Shes moving in
someone help me
I need to save them
Copyright ©
lipsofanangel
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2006-12-13 13:53:03]
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Re: Save them leave me
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by one-curly-fry on
Wednesday, 13th December 2006 @ 06:39:39 PM AEST
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OMG, it left me wanting to know what happened next. There's a lot in this - a lot of hinting, without explanation.
I hope it all turned out ok. I really don't know whatelse to say - I'm just sitting here visulizing the situation, but nothing comes to me but the feeling of having to get up and protect those kids :-/ Sorry, I usually have a lot to say in my comments, but this just knocked me sideways... I guess a little too close to home...
Great write
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Re: Save them leave me
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by Sturgezulu on
Wednesday, 13th December 2006 @ 07:18:58 PM AEST
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| Strong one this,im very curious myself on whats its based on. |
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Re: Save them leave me
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by lyddie on
Thursday, 14th December 2006 @ 12:00:58 AM AEST
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i like ur poem very meaningful
lydia |
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Re: Save them leave me
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by Whisper on
Friday, 29th December 2006 @ 11:46:55 AM AEST
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That was a frightening write. I could see the fear and panic from the words. I trust that the girls were made safe and the nightmare that seems to have remained with you be laid to rest at last. Peace to you
Whisper |
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Re: Save them leave me
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by soulsearching43 on
Wednesday, 7th February 2007 @ 12:43:48 PM AEST
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| powerfull well written and wow |
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