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Drown
Contributed by
ooube
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Wednesday, 6th December 2006 @ 08:47:54 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Treading water’s the only option,
Place your trust in the action,
Constant, like a heartbeat,
Detached and distant.
Limbs numb from the coldness of your words,
Emotions deadened by your actions,
Pulled under again, and again, and again,
Pushed around at will,
A marionette to the sea; to you.
The keel smashed, the hull breached
I thought what we had was strong,
I thought it would last,
It took a moment for you to tare it down.
Blinded by our passion,
Blindsided by a wave of deceit,
How could I miss the signs?
Not see the splintering, feel the rust?
Tired now; of swimming, of aching,
Thrashing around and getting nowhere
Sink or swim?
Women and children first,
But I think I’ll stay,
The good go down with the wreck,
The foolish tread water.
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ooube
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2006-12-06 08:47:54]
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Re: Drown
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by Nothingness on
Wednesday, 6th December 2006 @ 09:40:39 AM AEST
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Wow very strong write I liked the last stanza the best i personally agree with it, well done
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Re: Drown
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by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 6th December 2006 @ 11:07:16 AM AEST
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wow i like how the flow of this poem goes.. i like how you took a sea like approach to it.. awesome job in the write though..
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