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There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 02:56:59 PM in AEST
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How do I forget
how cowardly I wept
for the silence that crept
And how do I believe
I'm owed a reprieve
from a need to bereave
I live for silence
I dream in violence
I loathe compliance
Unsettled by memory
I'm shielded in mockery
a callous monstrosity
Unstable by nature
furthered through nurture
a crumbling structure.
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2006-12-05 14:56:59]
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 03:09:22 PM AEST
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I like the rhyming scheme.
As for the content, well, don't forget your friends. |
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 04:38:02 PM AEST
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Scorp, You stay silent for so long and then you come up with these pieces that just friggen shout out. What a wonderful write. Great word usage. Keep strong, sis.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 05:47:25 PM AEST
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i love the flow of this piece scorpy!! awesome job enchanting.. makes you think
JENNI |
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by secretwind on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 05:54:59 PM AEST
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well done
good flow
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by brew on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 06:21:13 PM AEST
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always a plesure to read what scropy can make worth , reading.......Well done...Hope all is well you hun...I will get back to e-mailing ya....
Hugs
Brew~ |
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 06:26:13 PM AEST
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Nothing's gonna keep you down girl! You rock dearest Scorpy. You can really pen and deliver a write well worth the read any given time. So does that mean I gotta chain ya down to keep ya here @YPDC from doing your disappearing act on us, lol. It's good to read your poetry again my dearest Scorpy.
Chin up sweet girl~
love n hugs,
Sue M |
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 07:50:21 PM AEST
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Intense write well structured but one comes to expect greatness when it is attached to your name.
Michelle |
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 08:00:21 PM AEST
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oh hunni bunches!!!
EXCEPTIONAL!!!! (don't forget .. I know where
you live!!! lol)
I loved this piece completely, but this line ..
I loathe compliance
OMG ... it's SO you!! (and me! must be the
scorpy in us! )
You got my number hun .. and my cell .. if ya
need me, you know what to do .. :)
nice to see you posting again, sweets.
*hugs you tight*
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by jyssvw22 on
Friday, 8th December 2006 @ 06:09:04 PM AEST
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this write seems as though you are trying to explain to yourself something you already have figured out…. I liked it for its intensity and the brief but potent lines rushed the words by effortlessly.
Well executed
As always-
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by The_View on
Tuesday, 19th December 2006 @ 10:01:39 PM AEST
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| Different from what I've seen lately. I liked it. |
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by wizard on
Thursday, 21st December 2006 @ 11:47:45 AM AEST
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hey scorp,
awesome write here... each stanza is like a short flurry of punches, i can feel the pain and sadness..
great job,
wiz |
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Thursday, 25th January 2007 @ 12:44:41 PM AEST
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Amazing..
Take care
Christina |
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 17th February 2007 @ 10:48:35 PM AEST
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I'm not sure I could ever properly put into words, just how relevant this is to my own self-perception.
..such a frightening comparrison, that it's almost too much to comprehend..
phew..
B
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by emystar on
Sunday, 18th March 2007 @ 01:35:42 AM AEST
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A bit sad but beautifully written, my friend.
Big huggs,
emy |
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd August 2013 @ 12:49:03 AM AEST
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I looove that third stanza!
I enjoyed this little diddy even though it's listed under sad poetry.
I too am unstable by nature.
Lastly, I can see why I missed this original posting as that time period was a very VERY sad time in my life. But I saw it now and thank you for posting an enjoyable read, even though it's years later. Was seriously not getting into a lot of what I read tonight so just thought I'd drop by the guarantee page of the Scorpendous one! It worked. Thankies.
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Re: There She Goes ( Down, Down, Down )
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 22nd May 2014 @ 05:51:56 PM AEST
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beautiful heartfelt expression of feelings, a lot of
power in this little gem, also i love your note; isn't
that the way life goes? at least we are poets who
can write about it,
hugs n' love nessa |
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