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the world
Contributed by
PhantomVampyress
on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 01:37:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Darkness decays
vengence plays
while the heart repays
your loss
their gain
opposing sides left in the shame
the hand you smack is the hand you cry out for
mouth spewing curses
repeating the same verses
over and again
your all stuck with your own sin
make amends
hatred ends
JENNI
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PhantomVampyress
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2006-12-05 13:37:58]
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Re: the world
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by crazy on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 01:44:33 PM AEST
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| wow i like this. it's got a sweet ring to it when you hum it. Such a sence of the world and finally someone who see's the world in the way i do. welcome back to ypdc. |
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Re: the world
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 06:07:25 PM AEST
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You go girl~ Your well penned words are spot on. Short and to the point. Well done dearest Jenni~ I thoroughly enjoyed it. Thanks so much for posting it~
warm huggers,
Sue M
PS It's great to see you posting again :-) |
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Re: the world
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 10:40:37 PM AEST
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Right on, Jennittude. I really dug this. Very well written. Glad to see you writing again.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: the world
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by NDean on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 12:35:41 PM AEST
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| Flows spectacularly. And as i read I feel as though a speed up as the anger builds in the poem. Its like someone about to Blow. Cool |
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Re: the world
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by Errious on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 12:36:58 PM AEST
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cool. i really like this. i like how it builds tension up and how it ends on 'ends'.
Tom |
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Re: the world
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by Spike on
Sunday, 10th December 2006 @ 03:06:07 AM AEST
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Worthy sentiments buried in a metre with a real hook to it.
S |
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Re: the world
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 13th December 2006 @ 05:40:17 PM AEST
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Profound piece, like someone else said, short and to the point. Very good insight. Excellent write.
wabl
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Re: the world
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by myheartsvoice on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 06:36:32 PM AEST
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This is realy provacitive, sad ain't it, with all the hate in this world i wonder why that is. very beautiful thoughts in this little masterpeice, not to mention how true what you say is. Keep up the good work.
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Re: the world
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by trueecho on
Wednesday, 31st January 2007 @ 04:17:52 PM AEST
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upbeat and pointed at the same time..very nice
trueecho
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