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~*My Aching Heart*~
Contributed by
eternal_dreamer
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Monday, 4th December 2006 @ 03:52:04 PM in AEST
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Blackened clouds fill the horizon
Lightning strikes the fearsome sky
Thunderstorms stir me from sleep
As tears like rain fall from my eyes
In the palm of my quivering hand
My aching heart lies there broken
Battered, bare and beyond repair
Pain cast an unbearable token
Jagged thoughts of yesteryear
Bring me nothing now but pain
I have made every effort to let go
But my thoughts recycle again
I made a vow to give you my utmost
Whispered to heavenly angels above
A brainless fool you turned out to be
You thought money can buy you love
The rain pelts against my window
As I warm myself by the open fire
I know I’m not lucky and in love
But one day I’ll have what I desire…
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by Saloni on
Monday, 4th December 2006 @ 04:18:49 PM AEST
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wowwwww!!!!! brilliant poem!! love the way u wrote it.. full of emotions... i knw hw u exactly feel..
keep strong!!
u have 2 move on.. and forget him.. time will heal just try to keep urself busy.. i knw its hard but its life & destiny!
u will find someone who trully loves you frm the bottom of his heart.. u just have to wait for the right 1..
u take care till then.. i'm here 4 u wenever u need me..
lots of prayers and love for you sue..
huggs n kisses
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by shelby on
Monday, 4th December 2006 @ 04:29:44 PM AEST
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Oh dear Sue, this tugged at my heartstrings.
Such pain expressed with your penned word.
If I had the magic wand I would take it from your wounded heart and make all right with you.
I am always here for you dear Sue
hugssss
~Michelle~ |
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by jerseysue on
Monday, 4th December 2006 @ 06:04:39 PM AEST
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| Your aching heart, that title is itself tinged with sadness. I sometimes feel that I will never love again, but who knows what fate has in store. You hang on in there my friend. Your a beautiful kind and very thoughtful person, and I wish you a glowing loving future, for you are very deserving of it. Hugs Sue x |
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by wizard on
Monday, 4th December 2006 @ 08:27:26 PM AEST
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what an amazing write, sue... i loved this.. i can relate (i'm sure you know this...lol)...your emotion comes through nicely...great flow and feeling...
wiz |
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by secretwind on
Monday, 4th December 2006 @ 10:41:16 PM AEST
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yes
one day you will
have
what you desire...
recycled thoughts always haunt us.
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by yangdantien on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 12:42:19 AM AEST
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May Desires arrive swiftly upon the next hour...
Your piece oozes pain and familiar longing...Well Done!
Your craft is well tended the pen is your mighty sword as
a definite exorcism is present these words have
the casting out and affirmation clearly stated...
Blessing Dearest Eternal & Infinte_Dreamer
Peace
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by NoSaint on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 09:36:42 AM AEST
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an amazing talent flows across the page in front of my eyes...
Shari |
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 12:23:09 PM AEST
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Sue, Ahhh sis your aching heart. Aching hearts are so damn painful. I love how you penned this. Your rhyming scheme just flowed right along. I wish you well my friend and the mending of this broken heart.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 07:01:05 PM AEST
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ENCHANTING WRITE!! I love the flow and its oh so sad.. you can feel the ache in this.. i love this piece.. its almost like a love story that didn't work.. as far as the love luck goes it will come when the time is right.. we all end up with jerks sometimes.. but it helps us grow and learn.. you will be stronger.. hang in there don't lose hope in love .. therei s always hope.. again ENCHANTING!!
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by emystar on
Monday, 11th December 2006 @ 10:50:14 PM AEST
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I can totally relate to this masterpeice.
Keep the faith friend.
Great writing!
big ole huggs, luv, joy, peace, happiness,
emy |
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 12th December 2006 @ 10:20:56 AM AEST
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| fantastic write from a fantastic writer..Sue you always pour your heart out in your poems, which is a gift,,may god shine down upon you and yours... |
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 12th December 2006 @ 02:29:55 PM AEST
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Wonderful work, Sue! I chose cowboy poetry for my venue so's I could use rhyme without free versers gittin' all over my butt. But you prove that magnificent writers can use rhyme 'n' don't have to excuse it as "cowboy". Masterful work, lady.
wabl
KenMoore
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 13th December 2006 @ 10:30:30 PM AEST
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awwwwww...giving you a big hug!!
Very sad and yet sweet...time.....time is the only true healer...wonderful write! |
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by Spike on
Saturday, 16th December 2006 @ 03:46:52 AM AEST
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Sue, such a poignant, heartfelt piece, proving the point that so much can be said in clean lines and unambiguous statements.
Hope springs eternal.
S |
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by RLSS on
Wednesday, 20th December 2006 @ 08:12:03 PM AEST
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The Death of Romance.
Love is a phoenix, reborn from the ashes. |
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by Clarity_Rising on
Tuesday, 16th January 2007 @ 10:31:03 AM AEST
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Excellent use of imagery and
intertwining your emotions with
the weather. I really liked theses
lines:
In the palm of my quivering hand
My aching heart lies there broken
Battered, bare and beyond repair
Pain cast an unbearable token
It makes you seem vulnerable and
exposed. You’ve captured “heart
break” perfectly. Best of wishes with
this situation!
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by myheartsvoice on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 10:04:35 PM AEST
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Though very sad this writting is also very beautiful. Love shall come to you in time meanwhile keep penning these beautiful poems of yours.
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by Crow on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 09:48:58 PM AEST
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| yes you will, there is so much intent" in the closing of this write, though hurt, there is strength I have read also. great work. Crow |
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by jmpy84 on
Sunday, 11th February 2007 @ 09:47:25 PM AEST
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| written well as always hope all is well |
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 16th March 2007 @ 03:30:07 AM AEST
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Sure you will SueQ... sure you will. *Hugs you* If we never experience broken hearts and loss of love how will we recognize true love when it arrives? And for those of us that have seemingly had more than our fair share of the former, I think that our reward will just be that much sweeter : ) Well penned, and remember: Keep your eyes and your heart open dear Sue!
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by venkat on
Thursday, 29th March 2007 @ 01:45:45 AM AEST
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Heart felt feeling and emotion flows from first to last..and the last line made me smile seeing light of hope...wonderful Sue.
best of luck..hugs..:-) venkat
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 24th April 2007 @ 01:53:50 PM AEST
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sadly beautiful....
love n' hugs nessa |
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 6th August 2007 @ 11:18:24 AM AEST
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Sue
He would have to be "A brainless fool" not to see the deep desire and passion you hold and write so well with. In my book, he does not deserve you. You will find what you desire.
Mike |
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Re: ~*My Aching Heart*~
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by FleurdeSang on
Saturday, 25th April 2009 @ 08:36:57 AM AEST
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Ah, my friend... I have been away from your page for far too long. Forgive me. As you know, life tends to sweep you away, kicking and screaming.. In any case, this is absolutely beautiful, as everything that flows from your pen, is. I do not know what else to say... I mirror this. Thank you for sharing with us, cheri. All my love.
~Stephy.
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