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December Sky
Contributed by
deadheadpoet
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Sunday, 3rd December 2006 @ 11:50:51 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Crimson skies bleeding out
in shades of blue and green
ecchymotic
hematomas
Sky has been fulled
Pockets of white and gray
fill my vision
Tips of sentinel's
fingers
glisten with frozen
silver light
shining endlessly
capturing small
images of colored
reflections
Sky and earth
melding into one
small
glistening
speck
of hydrogen and oxygen
captured in time
as so many past
Tell me it shall
never end
Cold air
sucking breath away
Meaningless I am
to this
Laura Horner
12-2-06
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Re: December Sky
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by yangdantien on
Sunday, 3rd December 2006 @ 01:13:17 PM AEST
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Delicious here on a Sunday morning...
Your capture here...
You are 'great meaning'
your piece ahh I can imagine finding this in a museum far far away... a billion years away...
A facsimilie of fragile earth held alongside these words as minds focus on:
"...Sky and earth
melding into one
small
glistening
speck
of hydrogen and oxygen
captured in time
as so many past
Tell me it shall
never end..."
And truly communicating much of existence here....
Well Done
AJPIII
PS I had to visit the dictionary for: ecchymotic
as Sky, earth and flesh meld into one...
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Re: December Sky
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 3rd December 2006 @ 01:16:08 PM AEST
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Maybe it's my mood today, Lauraloo... but this piece tugs at me something awful. So much so, "Tell me if shall/never end" made me catch my breath.
This time of year always has me feeling melancholy. The transition from warmth to cold, the disappearing colors and the arrival of seemingless endless grey - heralding the end of yet another year (*sigh*) - is... well... painful, really. This piece, obviously timely and indicative of pausing to take in the moment, isn't - I don't think - intended to be overtly melancholy... but it feels sad to me. Ah, December Sky... normally silver/grey... is blue too, in it's own way.
~Snemmy |
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Re: December Sky
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by NDean on
Sunday, 3rd December 2006 @ 02:06:59 PM AEST
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I love the structure. It feels like its bleeding, (sorry, im doing my GCSE Mocks and I cant stop using analytical Language) Anyway, i like how youve used words like Hydrogen. There hard to use in poetry, Well Done
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Re: December Sky
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by shelby on
Sunday, 3rd December 2006 @ 02:08:29 PM AEST
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You captured a beautiful scene and write here sis. Love it.
~Michelle~ |
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Re: December Sky
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by ever1der on
Sunday, 3rd December 2006 @ 06:36:29 PM AEST
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I love seeing my breath in winter air..I love you comparing the sky to bruising..wonder if that's ever been done before?
Great poetry.. |
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Re: December Sky
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 3rd December 2006 @ 06:48:05 PM AEST
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My dearest Laura while you beautifully describe winter skies up where you are we are enjoying the start of the summer season here in Oz~
With the wintery season along come the bouts of the blues. I was never really a fan of winter or summer, but I enjoy the season of spring when everything starts sprouting to life again~
A most descriptive masterpiece beautifully ascribed by the very talented and gifted Laura~ You have such a way with words my dear friend. It's always a treasured experience visiting your pages dearest Laura.
Thanks so much for sharing this remarbale piece of poetry with us.
warm love n hugs,
sue m
PS I learnt a new word thanks to you
"ecchymotic" :-)
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Re: December Sky
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by silver_crested_shadow on
Sunday, 3rd December 2006 @ 11:21:14 PM AEST
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| love the poem, very detailed with your words, really did love reading this |
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Re: December Sky
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by silver_crested_shadow on
Sunday, 3rd December 2006 @ 11:23:08 PM AEST
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| love the write, your detail with your words is great, loved reading this |
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Re: December Sky
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by wizard on
Monday, 4th December 2006 @ 08:33:56 PM AEST
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awesome write ... admittedly, i had to visit the dictionary as well...lol... great analogies!! i loved this!
wiz |
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Re: December Sky
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by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 6th December 2006 @ 01:19:21 PM AEST
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wow laurabean!! you write so beautifully.. you put into words how pretty the sunset is.. beautiful write.. or as i say .. ENchanting.. you truly are talented.. thanks for sharing this one.. ENCHANTING my friend!!!
JENNI |
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Re: December Sky
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 05:21:32 PM AEST
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The verbage in this poem is rather primal, such graphic and powerful imagery. I think you did a magnificent job of depicting nature. This poem really speaks to me of a function: how nature functions, and using physiological descriptions to describe natures function.
Well done my friend... as usual a super write
Will |
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Re: December Sky
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 08:29:39 PM AEST
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Tips of sentinel's
fingers
glisten with frozen
silver light
THAT, my dear sis, is absolutely stunning! If that is not
poetry, my sweet friend, I know not what is!! In fact, this
whole piece is SCREAMING poetic flair!! I love it altogether.
And there is something, just so special and beautiful and
GRAND about a December sky for me. The stars seem
so much more brilliant in the eve. And during the day .. there
is a magic that escapes most other months.
And you've done magic with this piece, hun.
Glorious!
*hugs*
~MG |
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Re: December Sky
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by one-curly-fry on
Monday, 11th December 2006 @ 08:44:27 AM AEST
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Great descriptive piece. Right now, I'm at the start of an Aussie summer, so a little different to what you must be feeling... lol...
The whole descriptions of the 2nd stanza - especially about the silver light... That whole section seems to silence me in a memory of growing up in the southeast (it got cold down there)...
Wonderful write!
- Tim |
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