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Sad Overture, Overdue
Contributed by
spike
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Friday, 1st December 2006 @ 05:10:50 AM in AEST
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Closing the Door on Love Cynthia Edgerly© 2005
Two souls embraced a wider world,
when our lives became entwined
so many, heady days of love
with kisses strong as wine
when we cast away that Eros veil
for friendship’s cloth instead,
we’d keep our hearts at distance
till we’d end up in your bed
mistakes were made, we didn’t care
our relationship was set
most times we would remember,
sometimes we would forget.
Until that fateful argument,
when you ran into the rain
my pleas for you to stop and turn
were shouted out in vain
so many days and nights I
thought you’d reconnect in time,
all the demons that were yours
had suddenly become mine
then it came to let you go
the distance formed and set
sometimes I did remember you,
and sometimes I did forget.
Now you make this overture,
the prodigal friend returns
but too late to open healed wounds
on which my world now turns
you still hold fast to your choice
your right to up and leave
all our history mattered none
that’s what I had to grieve
I feel a terrible sadness too,
a trailing of regret
sometimes I will remember you,
and sometimes, I will forget.
Copyright ©
spike
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2006-12-01 05:10:50]
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Re: Sad Overture, Overdue
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 1st December 2006 @ 10:40:04 AM AEST
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Poingent and sad, and so well written!
This is VERY well done, very flowing and creative.
I really like this alot, as cliche' as that sounds, I really do!
Bravo!! |
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Re: Sad Overture, Overdue
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by deadheadpoet on
Friday, 1st December 2006 @ 09:45:18 PM AEST
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Ahhh this was so well done. Well written. The heart fills the page.
Peace, Laura |
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Re: Sad Overture, Overdue
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by shelby on
Saturday, 2nd December 2006 @ 12:06:09 PM AEST
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Brushed with such tender sadness and vivid images, emotions running throughout that made the heart skip a beat and feel such pain while reading.
Beautiful
Michelle |
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Re: Sad Overture, Overdue
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 10:11:48 PM AEST
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I love this line, S ~
when we cast away that Eros veil
Eros .. one of my favourite Greeks ..
As for the work. The perfect rhyming and metre added
to the flow of the piece. The message here is forlorn, but
in some way .. so very meaningful. Those last two lines
grab me like none I've read in quite a while.
I've missed your work, Spike. I wish Time would allow
a more genial usage of my existence .. seems I am
never granted the simple pleasures lately ..
(everything is so rush rush rush)
Glad to have read you tonight. This was so beautifully sad ~
~Breezy |
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Re: Sad Overture, Overdue
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 8th December 2006 @ 08:32:04 PM AEST
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You're so darn talented, Spikito. I've yet to come to conclusion on what impresses me more... you're ability to continously offer well crafted pieces of varied subject/style that are so consistently well executed - or - all the fabulous nuances that seem so naturally embedded in your work.
Here, though - without question - it is the tone, the honesty, those hugely impactful last four lines of each stanza... and... *sigh*... the italicized "will" there at the end that blew me away. One would have to be heartless or clueless to not feel something when reading this.
Nailed it, you did - again.
~Snem |
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Re: Sad Overture, Overdue
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 13th December 2006 @ 06:47:51 PM AEST
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Wow Spike, you have rendered me speechless~ You absolutely blew me away with this brilliant masterpiece. I have re-read this over and over. Snemmer's sums it up for me~ You nailed this~
Hats of to ya Sir Spike~
take care from ur fan/friend,
sue m
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Re: Sad Overture, Overdue
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by ArezzoSunrise on
Wednesday, 27th December 2006 @ 10:54:54 PM AEST
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Hey there, thought I'd return the favor of your being the first person to comment on my stuff.I read several of your posting and decided on this one to comment.
I can very much identify with this poem, but I am too much a coward to post romantically inspired stuff! The last line says 50% of the message; something I try to do but not near so successfully.Good job and thank you. |
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