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Death Wish
Contributed by
yangdantien
on
Thursday, 30th November 2006 @ 08:58:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Upon my demise
pray morbidity compressed
to ah, but a short gasp...
When worms meat ready instead
freeze till rock steady
Then invited just my foes
each issued short handled
splintered wood
sledge hammers
My vid on in the background blasting
telling them all what I really think...
Ending with 'Have At It' and a chuckle
goading each to whack
and smash me up to bits
it's the closest they'll ever get to it...
Then dear loved ones gather to
party drink and collect the remains un-discarded
for the fire to render.
Get that oven stoked
the one I fashioned for this occasion
My will directs each:
she works the bellows
you feed the fire,
y'all sweep to pack
the crate into boxes
hand carved from cedar and ash
The markings engraved
are from the old world
when our only language
was hallucination and vision.
The symbols represent the face of union
'For once we moved as One...'
the dedication
'...to the hope we do so again.'
Then my love
she is charged to go to Madagascar
with my dust in tow
and travel into the deep
seeking a Banyan tree.
She will have mangoes for juice
and poems and songs we shared
waiting to hear the Indri's cry
cue to make a simple mud
and grout between the crooks
down near the roots and
wishing her last good bye
let me simply
rest in paste.
AJPIII
Copyright ©
yangdantien
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2006-11-30 20:58:30]
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Re: Death Wish
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by ClancyExistential on
Friday, 1st December 2006 @ 12:43:03 AM AEST
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| sick as always... |
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Re: Death Wish
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by shelby on
Friday, 1st December 2006 @ 01:49:54 AM AEST
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Man you are deep. Everytime I read your work I stop and read again and again. Once again I am at a loss, my mere words do not do your work justice. Whewwwwwww.
~Michelle~ |
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Re: Death Wish
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by deadheadpoet on
Friday, 1st December 2006 @ 10:26:19 PM AEST
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Damn man, I loved this. Banyan trees...aren't those some cool looking trees? You took me places as you usually do with your wonderfully vivid writing skills. Thanks man, I appreciate it.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: Death Wish
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 1st December 2006 @ 11:25:36 PM AEST
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Heya AJ~
Nah I don't find it sickening.
You know what I love about poetry~ It's a freedom of expression. Your work has such depth that it reaches out to the reader. You are a highly skilled poetic master AJ~
Shining bright as always my dear friend~
love n hugs from ur fellow poet/fan/friend,
sue m |
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Re: Death Wish
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 3rd December 2006 @ 09:51:46 PM AEST
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this was a really awesome poem. I think about this alot and you brought it out in words I would have never thought of.
Great Write!
Darkpoetress |
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Re: Death Wish
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by lyddie on
Tuesday, 12th December 2006 @ 10:08:46 PM AEST
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i like it man your poetry is really good!
lydia |
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Re: Death Wish
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by Teusday-Moon on
Saturday, 16th December 2006 @ 08:39:37 PM AEST
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| It reaches a level of disturbing that is beautiful and interesting. I think its really well written. good job! |
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Re: Death Wish
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by feralpen on
Monday, 19th February 2007 @ 05:43:23 PM AEST
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| This, as other of your works I have read, is intrigueing. Each is more than a poem, it is a study. Your diverse knowledge lets you enjoy the obscurity so appearant to you, so hidden to most, and so invigorating to the inquisitive reader. Your reference to the olden language and the banyan tree are not lost. |
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Re: Death Wish
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th March 2007 @ 11:54:30 AM AEST
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My dearest friend ,
this was one of the most well-constructed and beautiful "final words" piece I've read in
a very long while. I love that you would invite your 'foes' to "have at it" .. unique and splendid
notion. The last stanza is, to me, the most beautiful. It is indeed serene and comforting,
even amidst death and good-bye.
Incidentally, I was off to visit Hawaii (years ago now), and found myself in the middle of
Lahaina, Maui, downtown and standing in the shade of a very large Banyan tree. Standing
50 feet in the air and extending 200 ft from side to side, it was a very humbling site. The
tree had been brought from India when it was a mere 8 feet tall ..
I can't rightly think of a more peaceful or lovely place to
spend eternal rest, that at the root of one of these magnificent trees ..
Wonderful post!
~Breezy |
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