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Blackout
Contributed by
Amicus
on
Wednesday, 29th November 2006 @ 04:52:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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A shoutout
A blackout
Why do you do this to me
With everything we could be
Too bad the constant noise
And the never ending boys
I want you to leave this place
Never want to see your face
Tired of your lies
And your never ending tries
To destroy me
Never wanted us to be
Wanna break away
An' put my mind at bay
I want something to calm me down
So I went to the bottle
An' it left me with nothing but a frown
Just put my feelings aside
Don't nobody know i've cried
Now not even an ounce of pride
But you keep tryin'
To destroy me
Never wanted us to be
Wanna break away
An' put my mind at bay
I reload my gun
Time to have a lil fun
Put the gun next to my head
Pull the trigger an' wake up dead
I wake up in my fiery hell
Instead of flying I guess I fell
The Devil turns the light out
A shoutout
A blackout
Copyright ©
Amicus
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2006-11-29 16:52:30]
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Re: Blackout
(User Rating: 1 )
by flamingblade on
Thursday, 30th November 2006 @ 10:31:41 AM AEST
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very powerful poem
you did well
i like how you repeated
"A shoutout
A blackout"
Very dark, good job |
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Re: Blackout
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by tearstained_soul on
Friday, 1st December 2006 @ 04:27:36 PM AEST
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"i wake up in my fiery hell,
instead of flying i guess i fell "
that was the best phrase of the poem and this poem was GREAT, i love how powerful it was and the repitition of "a shoutout, a blackout" keep up the good work!
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