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Death Becomes You
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Sunday, 26th November 2006 @ 01:57:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
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It looms
overhead
never far
no, never far
It longs
to reach out --
grab
come to collect
It lingers
like
fog
obscuring
the
view
It lasts
forever
with you
and I
in its
bowels.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
... [
2006-11-26 13:57:41]
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Re: Death Becomes You
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 26th November 2006 @ 02:42:35 PM AEST
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That title seems so familiar. That write, indeed haunting. I feel I shall live after death, but then the fear of leaving or losing those you love, scares the F out of me. Too many close, have gone on. Deeply intense write, Scorp, said with so few words.
Thanks for sharing, and making me think.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: Death Becomes You
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by shelby on
Monday, 27th November 2006 @ 12:17:16 AM AEST
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gripping write my freind.
michelle |
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Re: Death Becomes You
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 27th November 2006 @ 05:51:36 AM AEST
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Now that's what I'm talking about ~ Your work has been missed here my dear friend as you have been too. So much said in little amount of words. You can always produce and deliver poetry that is well worth the read.
Rock on Scorpy Baby~
love n hugs,
sue m |
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Re: Death Becomes You
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by brew on
Monday, 27th November 2006 @ 07:44:53 AM AEST
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My sis Scorpy.........Sure missed you and your comments........And what a write.!!!! Hope all is well with you, and things are going in the right, or left paths.....lol. Man dont go away again so long. Powereful write. Take care
Hugs
Brew~ |
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Re: Death Becomes You
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by doug on
Monday, 27th November 2006 @ 08:39:56 AM AEST
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This certainly paints a picture
of impending demise that may
arrive at any second. The line
" It lingers like fog obscuring the
view " reminds me of a description
of hades I once
heard where the dead blindly wander
in an underworld of total darkness.
Chilling. Truly , Doug |
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Re: Death Becomes You
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by Willofree on
Monday, 27th November 2006 @ 11:55:51 AM AEST
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A very graphic and emotional depiction of death. I'm assuming the "it's" refer to death....that i'm not missing something. The title is gripping and intreguing. A different belief then mine, but death is certainly the end of life as we currentely experience it.
I haven't seen you post lately, It's good to read your poetry again.
Well done Scorp
Will |
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Re: Death Becomes You
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by wizard on
Monday, 27th November 2006 @ 01:08:04 PM AEST
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so much truth in this write, with so few words...this was great, i love it!!
wiz |
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Re: Death Becomes You
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 27th November 2006 @ 07:55:49 PM AEST
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Short, but extremely well written scorpy. I can't say I fear death, perhaps it's my ignorance, but I've faced it, and lost quite a few loved ones - but I've grown because of it, though long before I believe I should have. Always an appealing and interesting piece scorpz, can't wait for more.
-Cassy |
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Re: Death Becomes You
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by SocialMisfit on
Thursday, 30th November 2006 @ 06:13:22 PM AEST
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hmm, maybe i have been gone awile, but this seems like a new turn in your style, still good, just differant.
SM |
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Re: Death Becomes You
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 08:15:17 PM AEST
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oh sweetie .. something is lingering here ..
I can't put my finger on it .. but it is excruciating
and sad ..
your writes never fail to evoke emotion in me.
Emotion that I dare not ever evoke on my own,
for fear it might consume me whole. The last few lines ..
oh gosh, hun. They are just so painful ..
You paint your emotions so exceptionally well, sweets.
brilliant ~ there is no other word for this~
*hugs*
~Breezy
[so sorry to be late in coming ... as others have
been made privy to, I have been working two
jobs and have NO time(not even for sleep! lol)]
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Re: Death Becomes You
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd August 2013 @ 12:51:35 AM AEST
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| Geeze, ***** scary! |
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Re: Death Becomes You
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 6th December 2014 @ 01:44:47 PM AEST
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so true, so true, we just never when know, do we? happily
living life one second then in an instant everything is gone
and changed forever and ever.... short poem but powerful!
hugs n' love nessa |
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