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Dreaming Space
Contributed by
BlackDeath
on
Thursday, 23rd November 2006 @ 05:48:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Mystic Shadows Pace The Walls,
Dancing Nightmares; Eerie Calls.
Smiling Faces Of Deranged Cases,
Souless Floating Mental Patients.
Darkness Covers, Thick As Carpet,
Eyes Bright And Empty Starlets.
No Windows, No Doors, Just Empty Space,
How In The Heck Do I Get Out Of This Place??
Flowing Energy; How Energizing,
Sunspots appear In The Dark How Surprising.
Stairs Appear from Cold Concrete,
Is This The Way Out I Seek??
As Time Slows Down All Around Me,
Lips Struggling To Move; A Silent Plea.
Decayed Carcass, Touch Of Acid,
Future Thoughts lost; Placid.
Realizing Fears That Come Alive,
Pick Up The Pace, I've Gotta Survive.
Ghosts, Ghouls, Zombies, and such,
They All Surround me, Creeping Death Touch.
They All Said,"Cute When You Scream."
Waking Up From Gore Filled Dreams.
Still In This Place, Alone So True.
Screaming Softly,"It'll Get You Too."
Copyright ©
BlackDeath
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2006-11-23 17:48:29]
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Re: Dreaming Space
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 23rd November 2006 @ 05:58:17 PM AEST
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Um, I do hope your dreams become more pleasant ones than this. They're not a dream they're more like a nightmare.
Although you had me captivated from beginning to end. The flow and rhyme are sensational. A bit on the eerie side, but I love it! Way to go~ A top write. Thanks for sharing it with us.
warm hugs,
sue m |
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Re: Dreaming Space
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by tin on
Thursday, 23rd November 2006 @ 08:15:03 PM AEST
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| flows and rhymes superbly. it is quite eerie, but who said eerie was a bad thing? |
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Re: Dreaming Space
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by wizard on
Thursday, 23rd November 2006 @ 08:39:01 PM AEST
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i enjoyed this...nicely done!
wiz |
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