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Inscription of a Stoned Heart
Contributed by
Lips
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Wednesday, 22nd November 2006 @ 05:44:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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A swirling flurry of wind
On a black inked day
A jagged tree, curling branches
Barren of life
'Cept for one solitary raven
Swaying slowly in the wind
I look at the raven
And though our eyes meet
Acknowledged our presence
I never felt more alone
Cold and baron as the snow
People reach out so many times
But here I chose to be
Alone with the lonesome tree
Cemented to this place
I choose to remain under lock and key
A brick once fallen
From a wall so high
For a moment I thought
It might be time to fly
But a petrified heart leaves me here
So I wave to you dear raven
Holding tightly to the branch
And so I write my emotions on stone tablet
Inscription reading plainly
No trespassers allowed today
No trespassers ever allowed to come play
Copyright ©
Lips
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2006-11-22 17:44:43] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Inscription of a Stoned Heart
(User Rating: 1 ) by MisfitMe on
Wednesday, 22nd November 2006 @ 05:56:40 PM AEST (User
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A great owning of self~imposed solitary confinement!
BigLoveMuchPeace,
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Re: Inscription of a Stoned Heart
(User Rating: 1 ) by sally-heart-jack on
Wednesday, 22nd November 2006 @ 11:34:18 PM AEST (User
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I LOVE THIS SORT OF STUFF!!
The imagery, like the beginning, is so awesome.
"I look at the raven
And though our eyes meet
Acknowledged our presence
I never felt more alone"
"People reach out so many times
But here I chose to be
Alone with the lonesome tree"
"And so I write my emotions on stone tablet
Inscription reading plainly
No trespassers allowed today
No trespassers ever allowed to come play"
It really fits the theme well.... I wish I could know what the cause of pain is but it's definitely heavy..... even if it is or isn't fiction.
Write more with this hard emotion, I;d definitely love it.
^^ good job
__Julia_
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