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One Last Reflection
Contributed by
the_wampum_pimp
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Monday, 20th November 2006 @ 09:09:17 AM in AEST
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I am such a worthless boy,
Pathetic, not insane,
How is it that what gives me joy,
Does also render pain?
So far gone, I fear not death,
And every moment cursed,
I've found that this my final breath,
Is better than my first.
Stripped of my humanity,
A rather pointless veil,
Without it I can clearly see,
That with it humans fail.
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2006-11-20 09:09:17]
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Re: One Last Reflection
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by myloveispure on
Monday, 20th November 2006 @ 09:18:04 AM AEST
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| good write.but remember you arent worthless.nobody is.everyone is here for a reason,everyone serves a purpouse.its just your job to find it. |
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Re: One Last Reflection
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by annoiosa on
Monday, 20th November 2006 @ 09:47:42 AM AEST
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| I enjoyed this alot, and I agree with the above comment :) |
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Re: One Last Reflection
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by ever1der on
Monday, 20th November 2006 @ 11:45:18 AM AEST
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So far gone, I fear not death,
And every moment cursed,
I've found that this my final breath,
Is better than my first.
I really liked the flow this has..it just feels natural,
rolls off the tongue. good job. |
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Re: One Last Reflection
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 21st November 2006 @ 02:04:45 AM AEST
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Impressive piece of work. It's brief, but manages to say quite a bit, and you've done a good job hanging on to the integrity of the language while using strict rhyme/metre, avoiding the impulse to warp lines to achieve a rhyme.
A bit bleak, but a perceptive observation. It is good to understand the dark and helpless side of humanity, if it makes our focus on the light any clearer, less held back.
Keep it up.
Andrew |
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