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Passer By
Contributed by
LadyStrdust
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Thursday, 16th November 2006 @ 04:20:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Passer By
You are a thunderstorm, tossing the ocean, stirring the salt that stimulates my naïve and innocent opinions that I project in the form of writing and tell myself are art.
Thank you for the chaos, I appreciate the pain you cause, it opens new veins that spill innovative music only you could create.
I am a novice. It excites me when you speak and I am in awe of your intensity. Don't question my awareness. Cool in the darkness of your shadow I observe your talent and accept my own inadequacy. I want to write about you. Appropriate as all I think and dream of is the modesty accompanying the relentless beauty that restricts my normally mature demeanour to jealousy.
I wish I knew what you know. I wish you wouldn't make me ask. I wish you didn't exist until I walk into your room, that you'd disappear with the loss of me.
Your presence makes me breakable.
Yet I am too hooked to be strong enough to protect myself from the approaching agony I foresee you inflicting.
I cherish these moments, your undivided attention, your non-judgemental gaze.
I borrow your humour in order to laugh at myself. A beacon spraying shards of jagged light through the dominant sadness that possesses the end.
This is not the end and you are not the first. Are love is not tragic as you could have me if you wanted. You just don't want it.
Your smile is sympathetic and drying my tears is a chivalrous favour you grant me as a gentle passer by.
My heart all though dented lies unbroken, as I never truly knew you.
Copyright ©
LadyStrdust
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2006-11-16 16:20:14]
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Re: Passer By
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by MisfitMe on
Thursday, 16th November 2006 @ 04:37:55 PM AEST
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I'm in love with your style of expression...of course the content inspires the mother in me to all sorts of advice...But, I will spare you. Good write!
BigLoveMuchPeace,
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Re: Passer By
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by emystar on
Friday, 17th November 2006 @ 12:02:02 AM AEST
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Well, I must say that we all have these thoughts etc.
This is remarkably smart writing.
U remind me of a few old timers on this site that are very in active.
Welcome and I'm on to your next one.
Big huggs,
emy
Who me?
I'm just a country gal. smiles |
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Re: Passer By
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by yangdantien on
Saturday, 25th November 2006 @ 08:47:10 PM AEST
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I too enjoyed this and as my fellow poets here spelunk for jems sometimes I only have to follow the veins the have mined.
Your words here are rich in texture I enjoy the interpay of your elements:
"...I observe your talent and accept my own inadequacy..."
A profoundly honest confession for which I truly hope you have accepted absolution as your own talent is forever developing.
"...Your presence makes me breakable..."
I feel a real heart here beating
"...My heart although dented lies unbroken, as I never truly knew you. "
A wonderful pearl emerges when you schuck open this shell.
Peace
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Re: Passer By
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by Manda2 on
Tuesday, 28th November 2006 @ 04:12:57 PM AEST
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| You're so talented, I think your poetry is wonderful! KEEP WRITING!!! |
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Re: Passer By
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by lillyjane on
Tuesday, 28th November 2006 @ 04:45:56 PM AEST
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| Well you should think about getting this work published you have a wonderful talent cant wait to read more xxxxx |
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