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When the wind is still
Contributed by
stevenescalante
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Wednesday, 15th November 2006 @ 03:46:53 AM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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When the wind is still make a wish,
Because i want to hold you tight when it blows,
it doesnt matter how fast or how far it goes,
let us be together for our love is right not wrong,
And if any one questions it just tell them its strong,
i cant explain the bond we have its something like rubber,
when you try to break us you just bounce back like flubber,
my feelings for you will always remain,
even if you break my heart someday they'll still be the same,
i love you that much you must understand,
if you need love help than let me give you a hand,
Me and you are real we'll always stay true,
we'll stare into each other's eyes at night till the sky turns blue,
i'll shed blood at times just your love,
your so graceful like a dove,
But when the wind is still, let me be that wish.
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stevenescalante
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2006-11-15 03:46:53] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: When the wind is still
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Wednesday, 15th November 2006 @ 11:36:50 AM AEST (User
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Steve,
The message within this is lovely.
Nice display of beautiful images,
though at times I feel the rhyme is forced a little bit, that takes a bit away from the entire write. I catch myself doing the same thing alot.
Do keep up the writing though!!
~Michelle~ |
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