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Risk
Contributed by
bonita2689
on
Friday, 10th November 2006 @ 10:13:17 AM in AEST
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I'm fighting a devil's battle,
sweating incomprehensively
in an ethereal existence,
watching crimson float as flame.
I'm sparking a salacious rendezvous,
confusion hissing in my ear;
a malicious tale of lies, deceit
and purging a sanguine slumber.
I'm teetering the edge of intoxication,
throwing a gaudy fair for those inquiring;
a genuine masquerade to epitomize
my unbelievable, asphyxiated charade
but the greatest risk...
I'm breathing a breath all my own:
swallowing my life half-languished,
purging my dreams of maledictions
-breaking my shell of diffidence.
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bonita2689
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2006-11-10 10:13:17] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Risk
(User Rating: 1 ) by trini on
Friday, 10th November 2006 @ 09:30:14 PM AEST (User
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This had good meaning, and i liked the stregnth
BUT i found that the wording was a little too large for my taste, i spent too much time thinking about what "epitomize" ment and not so much the next paragraph.
keep up the good work
-Trini
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