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The girl
Contributed by
Davinah
on
Friday, 10th November 2006 @ 07:48:58 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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The girl with the longest fingernails
Scratching the surface of unexplored worlds
Is there an upside to you nether regions
Or do we leave things unattended?
The lipstick traces on your blouse
Pink and glossy remains of desperation
Would they clash with the red of your desire
The noose bleed, witness of your attempt to freedom
Does happiness coincide with your agony
There’s no room for two in one world of suffering
The mystery of it all is written in your troubled eyes
Red-rimmed, surrounded by blackness
The marks on your body tell your unknown story
No one will listen because no one cares
Only the ones with the trained eye will read between your lines
As bits of your story unfold and paint and unclear picture
Forever your death remains a mystery
Copyright ©
Davinah
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2006-11-10 07:48:58]
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Re: The girl
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by trini on
Friday, 10th November 2006 @ 09:34:52 PM AEST
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This is good. intreguing but confusing, i liked it, it kept me thinking it put good imagry into my head
thanks for the poem
keep it up
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Re: The girl
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by yangdantien on
Friday, 10th November 2006 @ 10:17:07 PM AEST
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This piece has the earmark of being written by a CSI by day, poet at heart. It was really well conceived and has a forensic quality...you present the mystery well.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Peace
Yang
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Re: The girl
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by Balmain_Tiger on
Saturday, 11th November 2006 @ 08:17:15 AM AEST
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| What mystery when search for peace. |
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