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Drink Me
Contributed by
yangdantien
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Thursday, 9th November 2006 @ 06:48:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Bubbling yeast
in enzyme action:
I divine you,
as well read
each page dogeared as
one can hardly get enough
till leathered our bindings,
we crinkle like gloves
and jacket in cool crisp
well made tack,
together we saddle tomorrow
and ride till the bronco breaks
the moment wide open so
it is trained, comes to rest
when we jerk the bit
or flys like the wind
when heels we dig,
in to her tender protected sides
ribbed and riddled
with loam and hills,
caves to dwell,
mountains to perch,
so lands the fallen fruit.
In piles we ride to
natures brew and happy hours
as the chain of life bends to sip
each part to hum and buzz with feeling
and hearts beat
to listen and understand
these simple parts of speech
till one has extracted their meaning...
AJPIII
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yangdantien
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2006-11-09 18:48:59]
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Re: Drink Me
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by shelby on
Friday, 10th November 2006 @ 12:57:18 AM AEST
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Aj,
again this wrapped me inside each word.
There is something unique about your talent and writing that draws me in, your words are gems to the heart.
~Michelle~ |
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Re: Drink Me
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by MisfitMe on
Friday, 10th November 2006 @ 09:01:47 PM AEST
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Consider this, "extracted" & drank from...more than once, actually. As it took a couple of reads to quench my thirst for understanding...
BigLoveMuchPeace,
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Re: Drink Me
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 11th November 2006 @ 02:05:37 AM AEST
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hmmm very interesting piece you have here.I agree with Michelle on this one.
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Re: Drink Me
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by CuriousitysCat on
Tuesday, 9th January 2007 @ 11:35:39 PM AEST
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Right on! I love the masterful metaphorical use, maybe i haven't fully extracted the meaning the first time around, but I am used to that. Your writing has a very unconventional feeling to it, and I am into it.
;]
~Jazz
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