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Tree
Contributed by
messiah_view
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Friday, 3rd November 2006 @ 12:19:57 AM in AEST
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From the pain which came
from the heart ,
the world become back
and arms are roots in the sky ,
and roots are arms in mud .
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2006-11-03 00:19:57]
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Re: Tree
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by flamingblade on
Friday, 3rd November 2006 @ 09:57:01 AM AEST
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it's short
but it's good
nice metaphor
or just a nice poem
depending on how you look at it |
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Re: Tree
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by MariusSurleac on
Wednesday, 17th June 2009 @ 05:35:17 AM AEST
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This poem is a good one, has a certain good flow but I would use "world comes/came back" instead of "world become"
Also I suggest you adding a "the" in the next phrase "arms in mud".
Nice poem!
Cheers,
Marius |
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