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Night Of The Entity
Contributed by
secretwind
on
Sunday, 29th October 2006 @ 02:17:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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With my eyes
at this moment
I am now listeing
to eerie sounds,
I shiver and shake
as unseen hands
slowly
pull my covers down.
In the shadows
I can see
something silently undulating
and I am feeling
a dark prescence
that chills me and fills me with fright.
The bed is now shaking
as my mind is cracking
as a force
holds me down.
A silent scream
fills my lungs...
as whispering voices
chant
and moan to me,
there's a slithering sound
as something
creeps across the floor
and my heartbeats
like it never has before.
I'm so scared
I can hardly breathe
as the entity
overwhelms me.
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secretwind
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2006-10-29 14:17:03]
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Re: Night Of The Entity
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by jerseysue on
Sunday, 29th October 2006 @ 03:43:40 PM AEST
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| good, I do love a spooky tale , at halloween time. Good expressive feel to it. Thanks for sharing. Sue xx |
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Re: Night Of The Entity
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 29th October 2006 @ 04:40:19 PM AEST
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You had me on my seats edge and you gave me goose bumps, lol.
A silent scream
fills my lungs...
as whispering voices
chant
and moan to me,
there's a slithering sound
as something
creeps across the floor
and my heartbeats
like it never has before
I could absolutely picture this moment inside my head. You have done an awesome job with this write. Well done and keep up the wonderful work~
big warm huggers,
Sue M |
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Re: Night Of The Entity
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by wizard on
Sunday, 29th October 2006 @ 05:40:14 PM AEST
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nicely done...reminds me of telling ghost stories and roasting marshmallows..
wiz |
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Re: Night Of The Entity
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by MisfitMe on
Sunday, 29th October 2006 @ 06:30:11 PM AEST
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Dark...you really sucked me in.
BigLoveMuchPeace,
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Re: Night Of The Entity
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by shelby on
Sunday, 29th October 2006 @ 11:53:12 PM AEST
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Gave me a shiver or two with this one. Right down dark and I love it! The deal with your heartbeat really sealed it !
Michelle |
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Re: Night Of The Entity
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 30th October 2006 @ 01:27:50 AM AEST
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Ooooo i love this kind of story
A silent scream
fills my lungs...
as whispering voices
chant
something about that that sent shivers up my spines.love it |
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Re: Night Of The Entity
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by Cupid on
Monday, 30th October 2006 @ 03:04:34 PM AEST
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Wow! This is very well done, secretwind!
Maybe you should read a poem of mine called 'Ghostly Encounter.' It's a little similar to this, but I had a particular entity in mind when I wrote it. ; )
Anyway, keep up the spectacular work! |
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Re: Night Of The Entity
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 30th October 2006 @ 04:03:51 PM AEST
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Yipes! Got scarier with every line. Nice work.
wabl
KenMoore
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Re: Night Of The Entity
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by emystar on
Thursday, 2nd November 2006 @ 04:57:41 PM AEST
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Didn't scare me as I know God gives us the power to rebuke these things in Jesus name, Amen!
Great writing tho.
luv ya buntches,
emy |
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