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enemy in time
Contributed by
spyndl
on
Saturday, 28th October 2006 @ 02:04:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Tick, Tick, Tick
I watch this world pass me by
Tick, Tick, Tick
Time never stops or slows
Tick, Tick, Tick
Watching these days pass me by
Tick, Tick, Tick
Time has come upon me, like a wave upon the shore
Tick, Tick, Tick
Crushing me against my mental prison
Tick, Tick, Tick
Why do I suffer endlessly
Tick, Tick, Tick
Maddening as the weight of reality sets in
Tick, Tick, Tick
I failed in this life
Tick, Tick, Tick
So I watch the clock
Tick, Tick, Tick
Wondering when my time is done
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spyndl
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2006-10-28 14:04:04]
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Re: enemy in time
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by MisfitMe on
Saturday, 28th October 2006 @ 06:21:53 PM AEST
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Sad. Maybe it's your definition of time that is the real enemy.
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Re: enemy in time
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by MariusSurleac on
Wednesday, 17th June 2009 @ 09:37:43 AM AEST
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| The poem is ok but those "tick, tick, tick" become annoying when repeated so much. I would let one in the head, one phrase with ticks in the middle and on eat the bottom. So the poem will look better and would be much easy to perceive the content of interest. |
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