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Tired of Love’s Queue
Contributed by
one-curly-fry
on
Monday, 23rd October 2006 @ 07:09:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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How long must I wait
to feel a soft hand on my cheek
eager mouth
- to touch mine
and that face that becomes alive
- just for me
with the simple joys I dream of
- breakfast in bed
- curled together watching movies
- laughing over music and car
a love so real
- it cannot be broken
so soft
- it makes me weak
all the things I hunger for
how long must I wait?
Here I am
twice burnt
but they say third time lucky
but where is she
the girl I know is real
and speaks her mind
is strong
but weak for me
as I would be…
at what chapter
- will she appear
in my life
with a heart like mine
and road I want to chase
someone who makes me smile
when I make her laugh.
How long must I wait
giving myself like an arrow
- without a target
like the fishing line
- without a hook
Here I am
confused and drowning
- under all the love I have
sleepless and cold
- in a comfy bed too big.
23/10/06
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Re: Tired of Love’s Queue
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by one-curly-fry on
Monday, 23rd October 2006 @ 07:11:12 PM AEST
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| Obviously the first line is supposed to have 'How' at the begining... Don't know how I messed that up!! lol |
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Re: Tired of Love’s Queue
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by emystar on
Monday, 23rd October 2006 @ 08:13:49 PM AEST
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I hate to be a kill joy but good luck in your quest. No, the third time isn't a charm so please don't bye that one.
I fixed your poem for you and put the how in for you. Hope u don't mind.
This is a great write and there's nothing wrong with being addicted to luv.
huggs, luck,
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Re: Tired of Love’s Queue
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by Alison on
Monday, 23rd October 2006 @ 08:20:09 PM AEST
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| i think that this is a very beautiful and sad write. i like the lenght of it, and the flow of the words is amazing! great write. |
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Re: Tired of Love’s Queue
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 29th October 2006 @ 08:23:22 PM AEST
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this about your girl? Your just waiting for that one special one...i think all you ahve to do is believe and oneday she'll show up and you wont even know it
this whole thing...its how i feel...just waiting and wondering "how long must i wait"
"confused and drowning
- under all the love I have
sleepless and cold
- in a comfy bed too big."
this reminds me of the aerosmith song "angel" one of my favs..if you've never heard it....just look up the lyrics..you'll see what i mean
i love love poems...just so passionate and always filled with feeling..even if they're sad love poems
this is really great! gonna go read more now!
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