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Blood Loss
Contributed by
Ruby2sdy
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Monday, 23rd October 2006 @ 05:01:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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And now it seems I can no longer write,
Just stare at the ceiling into the night,
This broken heart just ain’t good for my soul,
Another love lost has taken its toll,
It’s blood in my veins now; no longer prose,
As swift as it came, it suddenly goes,
Angry dreams, ruby red,
As thick as the blood-flows from the dead,
A deeper shade of black than I ever knew before,
Paints the eyelids of the one that I adore,
He doesn’t see me now, just a shadow of what I am,
How I wish I had it in me not to give a damn,
But each time he looks through me, I die a little more inside,
And I sink into myself; into the love that he lied,
My senses are weak, they’re craving his touch,
It’s not lust, or love, as such,
It’s just an ache that I can’t explain,
No, wait a minute, you might call it pain.
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Ruby2sdy
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2006-10-23 17:01:05]
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Re: Blood Loss
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 25th October 2006 @ 11:21:22 PM AEST
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Wow, This was really good. I could so feel the pain in this write. This part really tore at me.
"A deeper shade of black than I ever knew before,
Paints the eyelids of the one that I adore,
He doesn't see me now, just a shadow of what I am,
How I wish I had it in me not to give a damn,
But each time he looks through me, I die a little more inside
And I sink into myself, into the love that he lied"
Wow, that really touched me. Very intense emotions here. Thank you for sharing.
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Re: Blood Loss
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 28th October 2006 @ 07:43:03 AM AEST
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Love is a lot like pain isnt it? The only differance is you dont really feel better after love is gone. lol I think I prefer pain.
I liked this
Very well done
Roses
Larry |
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Re: Blood Loss
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by Balmain_Tiger on
Friday, 15th December 2006 @ 08:39:45 PM AEST
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| The feeling you describe I know too well I suggest you use the memory to make a future song |
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