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I Wish I Could Title This
Contributed by
New_York_Chick
on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 07:43:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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your charming words don't mean a thing
when I know I have to share them with half the world
how can I still love you this much
when the way you treat me is so unfair and cold
I used to believe in honesty and faith
and you were my proof of everything working out
but as I sit here waiting till it gets late
I know you've gone too far and I've hurt too much
for us to ever turn it around
I wish what I relied on wasn't a picture and a story
I write it in my head for lack of something better
without you I'm free to be straightforward with myself
so I keep returning to this lonely shelter
and things feel like they're on purpose lately
subtle hints and daggers aimed at no one else but me
I got so tangled in thinking I could tame you
but now all I want is for you to set me free
please let me be
I used to believe in honesty and faith
and you were my proof of everything working out
but as I sit here waiting till it gets late
I know you've gone too far and I've hurt too much
for us to ever turn it around
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Re: I Wish I Could Title This
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 08:29:45 PM AEST
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heartbreak sux. i doesn't matter what you title it...simply the topic you picked says it all.
and i know what it's like...it feels like everything was all a lie...
i like how you explained it though...beautifully, and not so angry like most people. i mean the anger is still there, but it's not as obvious as in most ppl's poems.
loved it,
- Bethani - |
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Re: I Wish I Could Title This
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 10:05:55 PM AEST
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..fantastic truth my friend.. and the repetitive lines
are most heartfelt-
I wonder a bit about the final stanza>
first line in particular:
"I used to believe in honesty and faith"
>>don't lose that honesty and faith~
great work~
B
B |
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Re: I Wish I Could Title This
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by doug on
Monday, 16th October 2006 @ 12:23:37 AM AEST
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The world is full of charmers
who do little more than weave smooth
words to get what they want.
You can never tame a rattlesnake.
They always bite sooner or later.
Great writing. be careful out there.
Truly , Doug |
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Re: I Wish I Could Title This
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by brokenwings on
Thursday, 19th October 2006 @ 01:33:28 AM AEST
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| your words have touched me because i just recently got out of a situation where this woudl explain exactly how i was made to feel but now i see i'm better off but it still hurts.. thanks for this write these words touched me.. |
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Re: I Wish I Could Title This
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 28th April 2007 @ 08:40:17 AM AEST
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love your style, a beautiful write....
love n' hugs nessa
roses |
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