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Life in Rhyme
Contributed by
Leoricx
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Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 06:27:58 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Hickory-dickory-dock,
The mouse ran up the clock,
But soon ran back down again,
Because he was scared of heights.
Hey-diddle-diddle,
The cat had a fiddle,
But he swapped it for a saxophone,
And now plays jazz in a seedy London club to fund a habit.
Baa-baa-black sheep,
Have you any wool?
Yes sir, three bags full of the stuff.
And unless you make me a decent offer, that's how they'll stay.
Twinkle-Twinkle little star,
How I wonder what you are.
"Basically," said the star, "I'm a big ball of burning gas,
"So there's no point in wishing on me."
Ring-a-ring-a-roses
A pocket full of posies.
We've all got the plague; The Black Death.
It's no wonder we all fall down.
Jack and Jill went up the hill,
To fetch a pail of water.
The well was bone-dry,
So, as well as being hungry, they went thirsty.
Though it seems such a crime,
That life's better in rhyme
I suppose there's nothing wrong with dreaming...
Copyright ©
Leoricx
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2006-10-14 06:27:58]
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Re: Life in Rhyme
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by one-curly-fry on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 06:57:01 AM AEST
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What a clever poem! I really like it and you're right about the metaphors in a lot of things - euphemism and the worlds full of it. Some are good, but some certainly are not.
Some, as you said, are good to keep the dream alive, others... well, let's not bother.
Loved this clever write!
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Re: Life in Rhyme
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 11:38:14 AM AEST
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It's wickedly ironic that I should read this immediately after the comment I just left on another piece.... one in which I rambled on about the darker side of nursery rhymes and children's songs (ring around the rosey being the example I used, actually).
I have to confess... I'd argue your concluding lines here. Life isn't "better in rhyme" - not really.... it just looks prettier, I think. Pain, death, heartache, hopelessness... it's all there in between the lines if one chooses to look long enough or deep enough to find it ---- which, I believe, was your point really. And that I will not argue.
~Snemmy
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Re: Life in Rhyme
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by Ruby2sdy on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 02:20:33 PM AEST
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What a clever poem, and the language crafting is excellent, I like the fact that the 'reality' you chose for these characters wasn't expressed in rhyme, like the 'dream' of them was; a subconscious way of hammering home your point. Very clever, and amusing (as well as truthful). I personally think the thing with nursery rhymes is that they're a way of sheltering children from the reality of life and death; making it sound prettier makes things less scary, and in honesty, children should be children; they shouldn't need to be too worldly-wise; it's just the terrors of this world can't be hidden by nursery rhymes any longer,
Tuesday x
PS - I especially liked the story of the cat! (-: |
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Re: Life in Rhyme
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by Honey56 on
Sunday, 15th October 2006 @ 03:38:57 AM AEST
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Very nice write...
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Re: Life in Rhyme
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by Freesia on
Sunday, 15th October 2006 @ 09:28:43 PM AEST
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Very original. I especially like the twinkle twinkle stanza.
Most amusing
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