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The Feel Of You
Contributed by
Nazmythian
on
Wednesday, 11th October 2006 @ 11:15:12 PM in AEST
Topic:
HumorPoetry
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I stood before you …
I stood before you
threadbare and trembling
anticipating your touch
feeling your heat
rise up to greet me ...
Feeling your heat
long before I lowered myself
into your velveteen depths
Your scent alone
was enough to intoxicate me
embolden me,
encourage me,
to slowly,
ever so slowly slide ...
Slide myself inside of you
asking,
pleading,
begging you
to take all of me
Oh, and the feel of you …
The feel of you
all around me
touching me,
caressing me,
enveloping
every square inch of my body
I began to perspire
as every pore upon my flesh
opened itself
unto your administrations
Wet hair clung to the sides of my face
resisting repeated attempts
to brush it aside
My skin began to peel away
as I floated freely
inside of you …
Then for a moment,
for the briefest moment
I felt …
almost
as though we were one
I had been away far too long
and I swore,
I swore
not to keep you
waiting near as long
for my return
I rinsed and toweled off
draining you
stepping slowly away
before turning out
the bathroom lights
… … … … …
Sometimes a bath
it just ...
it just feels …
So right !!!
~ Nazmythian ~
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Re: The Feel Of You
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Thursday, 12th October 2006 @ 12:09:28 AM AEST (User
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Hot mama you had me going! I was like oh my God! Whewwww lol. You my friend are the man!! Your imagination kills me I almost fell off my chair and choked on my darn cookie lol! Ok I'm under controll now, I think!
Got bubbles??
~Michelle~ |
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Re: The Feel Of You
(User Rating: 1 ) by deadheadpoet on
Thursday, 12th October 2006 @ 01:01:22 AM AEST (User
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Shoot fire...that was cleaver as hell. I was like fanning myself thinking ...whooohoooo Shannon, lucky mama *wink*. I got to the end and was like...you sneaky little devil...all that fanning myself over the bathtub. Michelle's right; you the man.
Great write.
Peace, Laura |
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Re: The Feel Of You
(User Rating: 1 ) by MsCrys on
Thursday, 12th October 2006 @ 01:56:13 AM AEST (User
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LOL I love this one! I was gettin' all hot'n'heavy myself here! Damn! I also really enjoyed reading it for the second time as a bubblebath instead of, well, you know *wink* Excellent work! I'm definitely checking out more of your work! |
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Re: The Feel Of You
(User Rating: 1 ) by LoveStruck_Hippie on
Thursday, 12th October 2006 @ 08:06:21 PM AEST (User
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All I can say is
Calgone take me away
Loved it sweety
~Shannon |
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Re: The Feel Of You
(User Rating: 1 ) by aniT on
Friday, 13th October 2006 @ 01:19:00 AM AEST (User
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I love this poem. I think it is funny how it ends up just being a bath.
Larica |
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Re: The Feel Of You
(User Rating: 1 ) by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 02:32:20 AM AEST (User
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Lmao you got really funny imagination
I laugh so hard my tummy hurt
lol i love this |
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Re: The Feel Of You
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 19th October 2006 @ 05:58:04 PM AEST (User
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You nasty boy you! I thought. . holy HECK!! How did this
slip past the censors??? LOLOL
You have the wackiest imagination hun. Don't EVER change!
This was written soooooooooo well!! You have an amazing
talent for double meanings, my friend!! (Shame on you
for tricking us like that! lol) Awesome!!!
*hugs*
~Breezy
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Re: The Feel Of You
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 24th October 2006 @ 12:38:36 PM AEST (User
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I bow to Master!!!!!!
Awsome job Nazzy! Clever as Heck and worded just right!!
One has to go back and read it a second time just to get the full double effect....Incredible! |
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Re: The Feel Of You
(User Rating: 1 ) by Willofree on
Wednesday, 15th November 2006 @ 10:32:32 AM AEST (User
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Naz,
Very clever and deliberate deception, in a positive sense. The influence of innuendo is very effictively demonstrated in this poem. Actually why does it have to be one or the other: why not both....? :)
I'll bet you had fun writing this, my friend.
Will/Terry |
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Re: The Feel Of You
(User Rating: 1 ) by GAMEchief on
Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 08:28:44 PM AEST (User
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lmao. Nice one. You got talent. |
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