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Taking Lucas to a coffee house
Contributed by
one-curly-fry
on
Monday, 9th October 2006 @ 08:11:55 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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I can laugh at myself
dreaming of a few feet
of years wearing away the freedom
leaving a man
still my boy
here in lounge chairs
in a coffee house
debating the trivial things
enjoying the tennis ball of ideas
when I like who I am
But I look across
without the blindfold of hope
A four year old
enjoying his biscuit and sugar drink
bubbles amuse him
and I pull a face
he laughs
I suppose I’ll settle for this
and love his freedom
hoping I’ll still like who I am
when he’s old enough to understand
and debate the trivial things…
8/11/04
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Re: Taking Lucas to a coffee house
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by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 9th October 2006 @ 09:57:32 AM AEST
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I loved your write. I was picturing the whole scene in my mind. I have a four year old myself. You'll have to share this, with your son, when he's a wee bit older. Splendid read.
Thanks for sharing.
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Re: Taking Lucas to a coffee house
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by joydeep_nath on
Monday, 9th October 2006 @ 11:34:07 AM AEST
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| nice wonderfully written... |
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Re: Taking Lucas to a coffee house
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by Alison on
Monday, 9th October 2006 @ 02:20:39 PM AEST
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| wonderful! i love it....its thoughtful and has a good flow to it, awesome write. (and it made me smile) |
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Re: Taking Lucas to a coffee house
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 10th October 2006 @ 02:15:13 AM AEST
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Aye, this is a meaningful one. I like the perspective that results from the setting and situation. Having done much more or less rueful pondering at coffee houses myself, it strikes a familiar chord.
Well done, well done.
Andrew |
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Re: Taking Lucas to a coffee house
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by The_Unknown on
Tuesday, 10th October 2006 @ 03:32:58 AM AEST
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I like this one, I could see the whole sceen play in my head. great job!!
luvs ya!
~*Jess*~ |
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Re: Taking Lucas to a coffee house
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by storyteller on
Thursday, 23rd April 2009 @ 10:28:02 AM AEST
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| Nice descriptions. |
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