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A Special Place Called
Contributed by
Kyle_67
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Sunday, 8th October 2006 @ 06:17:54 PM in AEST
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Bring me to that special place we call happiness
Tell me all my mistakes are forgivin
Don't hesitate to let me fall, when you can no longer hold me
Feel my breath escape your lungs
Let this moment forever hold us into an orchestra of a surreal ending
My Breath is almost gone, your turning on me
I try to gain you back with one more gasp of life
Your slowly passing away into a far distance from me
Echoes of yelling come crashing on my ears
I look up, people are yelling and panicing with tears
Sir, excuse me sir!, a man yells at me
I focus on him, and shiver to hear wut he was about to say
"She's dead sir, she's one of them now"
My last breath failed to help that woman become herself again
Blood poors onto my shoes, this was never going to end
I look up and whisper with fear , " Bring me back to that place called Happiness."
Kyle G. McDonald
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Re: A Special Place Called
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by Sproglet on
Sunday, 8th October 2006 @ 06:40:52 PM AEST
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Really evocative. Powerful, clear imagery
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Re: A Special Place Called
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by crazy on
Sunday, 8th October 2006 @ 07:08:19 PM AEST
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| kick ass.i like this alot.very ...makes me see what im reading .amazing job |
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Re: A Special Place Called
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 8th October 2006 @ 07:43:54 PM AEST
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Coming from the Nurse in me...I got such a feeling of giving CPR (Cardio Pulmonary Resuscitation) and that awful feeling of knowing efforts to revive someone would not and did not work. Not sure where you were in this, but that's where it took me. Good write....
Peace, Laura |
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Re: A Special Place Called
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by ever1der on
Sunday, 8th October 2006 @ 08:12:11 PM AEST
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| kind of chilling.. |
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Re: A Special Place Called
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by shelby on
Sunday, 8th October 2006 @ 08:18:19 PM AEST
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wowwww spellbinding and chilling.
reaches out and grabs the reader.
~Michelle~ |
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