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Contributed by
Ruby2sdy
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Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 05:19:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Those words you no longer comprehend,
Twist and flit, and break and bend,
The meaning’s lost when you say them aloud,
Sorry’s not a phrase for the proud,
You read the writing up there on that wall,
You made me stumble, crumble and crawl,
You stuck in the knife, and then twisted it round,
You cut me open; and look what you found,
Those words you cannot comprehend,
Fall from me, and break and bend,
I love you’s lost, when the heart’s broken;
I love you’s lost, when the words are spoken.
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Re: You
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 06:17:32 PM AEST
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Very well written. Enjoyed the read. Sorry anyone has to know how that feels....to have someone build you up..just to tear you down. Thanks for sharing.
Peace, Laura |
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Re: You
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 07:54:25 PM AEST
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Oh my .. 2sdy .. this is incredible!!
It reached right in and gripped me .. such a tortured write, my friend.
I knew by the category that it would not be an easy read .. but I was
not prepared for the flood of intimately painful emotion you
showered on us. Exceptionally emotive write.
impressed, as always
~Breezy
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Re: You
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 08:03:53 PM AEST
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2sdy~
A most sad and heartwrenching write. Breezy sums it all up for me. A sad, but most impressive write. You have been missed dearly my friend. I hope that all is well with you~ take care.
love, hugs n prayers,
Sue M |
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Re: You
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by ever1der on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 09:00:04 PM AEST
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| sorry is not a word to be spoken unless it''s meant..too often it's just another word..enjoyed the write..it was well crafted. |
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Re: You
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 09:49:59 PM AEST
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very deep emotions felt here
you are a good writter and rhymer as well
just keep on writing till briter days
and i will be here reading all along |
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Re: You
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by jerseysue on
Wednesday, 4th October 2006 @ 01:58:25 PM AEST
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| A really sad write, and very emotional. You describe these feelings so well. Very well written piece. Sue x |
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Re: You
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by Leoricx on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 04:10:02 PM AEST
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Those are three powerful little words. When said with meaning they seem to freeze time.
But when they're said without meaning, as you say, without comprehension, when it's said just for the sake of saying it, that when you get a situation like you have written about.
Well written and full of emotion, the repetition at the end really helps to hammer home the point.
Well done
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Re: You
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by wrdz on
Monday, 30th October 2006 @ 02:41:22 PM AEST
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| Like Breezy said, it was not only a difficult read, but it had to be just as difficult to write. Two thumbs up for this piece. Thank you for sharing it. wrdz |
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